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goddess

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One minute she looks like a goddess

shimmering on the brink

glowing with a secret.

 

People stop her in the street

“You look so beautiful” they say

amazed indeed at such translucent loveliness.

 

A moment passes and a thought.

Suddenly faded, who is she now?

They don’t recognise her anymore.

Like a plane crashing a thousand feet

in one second

it is all gone.

 

The joy, the hope, the loveliness.

Reality bites down with bloody teeth.

The truth comes up like a missile from the deep.

Rips her apart.

Spits out her heart.

 

And all that’s left

is drink,

and sleep.

 

 

photo gowimages

 

 

 

 

 

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 21st Mar 2010 22:52

Hi Graham - I guess I was hoping for a violent and dramatic contrast rather than coarse, but I am sure you have a point. I know you have a very sensitive ear for language - I remember you didn't like my microscope in another poem. Do appreciate you taking the time to think about it. xx And thanks Liam. xx

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 21st Mar 2010 20:42

Hello Ann. An interesting piece. I found the airplane and missile analogies a little coarse for such a lyrical piece. Lovely idea.

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Sun 21st Mar 2010 20:22

magnificent.

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