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A deafening silence

The gale whistled and shrieked

furiously around the chimney-pots.

The sea roared then crashed on the shingle

where the pebbles clinked and clanked.

The branches tap-tapped against the window-panes

like ghostly fingers left out in the cold.

The door creaked and the hinges squeaked

as they tried to get into the warmth.

The hedgerow rustled and the trees soughed.

The iron gate clanged and the   wind bells chimed.

The flaming fire spit and sparked,

the puppy whimpered and a lone dog barked.

She sat there like a small silent mouse.

It would have been earsplitting

if she  hadn't been stone deaf.

 

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jennifer Malden

Tue 5th Nov 2019 15:24

Thanks Kate, Tom and Branwell for the likes and kate for the comment too.
Jennifer

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Mon 4th Nov 2019 11:14

I really enjoyed this Jennifer. It's good when the words spill out with ease isn't it!

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jennifer Malden

Mon 4th Nov 2019 10:15

Wow! hadn't expected so much appreciation, as this was written v quickly. I've always liked onomatopoeic words.(admit to having looked the spelling up!) Thanks Ray, Keith and Poem for the comments, extremely encouraging, and Tom, Keith and Poem again for the likes.

Jennifer

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raypool

Sun 3rd Nov 2019 22:09

A victory of silence over sounds, making us appreciate the benefits of the cacophony of nature in the wild. Nice one Jennifer.

Ray

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keith jeffries

Sun 3rd Nov 2019 17:46

Jennifer,
the last line is perfect. Well written
Thanks
Keith

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