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The Great Refrain.

An old man stranded on a kerb

Reciting the bible

Stops, rises to his feet,

Counts the coins in a coffee cup

Gathered from guilt of strangers passing

Turns his head

To face the sky yelling

"what does it matter?"

 

Another child is buried

In the fires of Gaza.

A doctor watches

Bodies maimed, decaying

In a stalemate war

He denounces religion

And all its tragic consequences

Tears his clothes off

And walks naked to his death

Through the desert singing

"What does it matter?"

 

Two politicians argue

Fluently between truths.

An audience observes

This ugly rehearsal

Resigned, confined to sighing

In each head, a single thought

"It never mattered."

 

It is the chorus

Of our disappointment

The ballad of what life is meant to be.

Let it be sung now

Before our lungs

Turn to granite

And revolution

Is an old folk song.

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winston plowes

Thu 15th Apr 2010 23:36

Great strong brew of words in this one of yours which shouted at me. Sustained its strength an imagery till the end. Win

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Lisa Milligan

Thu 15th Apr 2010 17:06

These points you wanted to get across...you really nailed it. You really kept my interest and it had great flow. Very well written.

Lisa

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 15th Apr 2010 10:30

The ideas here are the magnificent ones of all true thinkers from 'forever'. Perhaps the poem could be a bit 'tighter' in its development of relationships, but, in my opinion, the last two lines 'And revolution is an old folk song' is the poem's most vital thought and a superb ending.

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Andy N

Thu 15th Apr 2010 08:19

enjoyed this piece, kealan... very well wrote i felt and i think very reflective off you...

not sure if the last line about is an old folk song is needed.. i think finishing with the previous line could be better x

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