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In the vastness of these feelings
I am fast approaching love.
In a manner of speaking
I am undoubtedly undone.
In the strength of his heart beat
I find the pace of my own quickening.
In the vastness of these feelings
I am fast approaching love.
His kisses send me into the abyss
In his arms I drown in his warmth.
In a manner of speaking
I am undoubtedly undone, for once.
I too liked this a lot although I would have liked the repetition at the end to mimic that at the beginning. A sort of wrapping up and affirmation. Good words though Georgina!
G - I liked this. It has, what is for me, the essential quality of poetry - rhythm
I also enjoyed the repetition, almost a circularity.
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<Deleted User> (7904)
Wed 12th May 2010 20:10
This is another good one...again it's simple and very well-controlled. The repetition adds to the devotional mood of the piece - like a prayer or a chant.