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Venusienne

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Men and women aren't the same

it’s written in the stars ;-)

Because I come from Venus

and you lot are from Mars.

Yet on a summer evening

if you would hold my hand

gaze into my Venusian eyes

I know you’d understand.

You’d speak sweet Martian nothings

into my shell-like ear,

translated to Venusian

t’would say “I love you dear.”

And our eyes would sparkle

like the planets up above

and with no language barrier

we could fall in love . . . .

x x x

 

 

 

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Francine

Wed 21st Apr 2010 20:48

Psssht... No cynicism allowed!
You must believe : )

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Isobel

Wed 21st Apr 2010 20:41

And even if you do manage to find a half decent translator - the cultural differences are so great that the nuance may be lost.
His 'I love you dear' might very well translate to 'Here are your handcuffs, now I'm going to tie you to the kitchen sink for the rest of your life'.

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 21st Apr 2010 19:46

he said "832= /3z1h8 & *z 2Qz!= ?=%$?"

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Julian (Admin)

Wed 21st Apr 2010 19:18

No, no this won't do at all. Translated into Venusian? How do you KNOW that's what it says. don't be fooled. These translators are notoriously unreliable. especially Martian ones. Perhaps, if you publish the original Martian text, we could find someone to check the translation, give you the harsh reality about these Martian types.

<Deleted User> (7790)

Wed 21st Apr 2010 18:39

The photo and the poem are both wry and rather wonderful.Will-E or Won't-E? xx

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 21st Apr 2010 13:36

How kind you all are - unfortunatley I appear to have no ears, shell-like or otherwise (see photo) to hear the sweet Martian nothings - good job that the eyes can speak volumes! xx

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Francine

Wed 21st Apr 2010 10:58

Of course 'it's written in the stars...
and with no language barrier
we could fall in love . . . .'

Love this Ann : )


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winston plowes

Wed 21st Apr 2010 10:35

Ann ! Wowser this is brilliant. So easy with this type of tight rhyme that it takes over and becomes trite. Not so here... the interest and the humour (for me) kept going right till the end. Great stuff. and a knitted Wall-E and eve as a bonus.. lol :-)

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