How strangely comforting
to see you there
occupying space somewhere
breathing air, as I might
touching keys as I write
in flight from site to site
Letters on a screen
phantom of a long dead dream
orange face upturned in smile
available to all
but one
whilst I log on
grey this day
invisible to all.
Hi Isobel,
I'm not entirely sure why, but this brings to mind the kind of lyrics that George Michael writes - a good thing in my book. It conjures up the sweet and sour comfort that sometimes comes from old memories and the stark objectivity that time and distance bring. A good write - as usual.
Regards,
A.E. x
Connected only by mechanical visible words - a very 'unhuman' intercommunication. Yet, more honest feelings are probably shared in cyberspace than in any other medium since 'talking together' began. We might as well be ghosts in one sense; yet pure language has never been so powerful. I really enjoyed this, Isobel. If I start to sound like a jerk, just tell me.
Thanks for your kind comments folks. The cyber world is a strange one,isn't it? But it can provide comfort at times.
Chris - I would agree with you about the structure - I never gave it a second thought - this poem just plopped out like an unplanned birth. I keep meaning to plan them better - my best poem to date was a highly structured one. Best dust that Stephen Fry book down again LOL
Thanks again x
Smiley smiley.....there is something quite fascinating about logging on and wondering who else is out there. Like Pete says there is a strange comfort in the connection you get with other users.
Cate xx
un-usual piece, isobel but i enjoyed this...
I like this ... though I wanted the second verse to scan with the first. But the emotion I can certainly identify with.
Cx
I could have written this!
Are we on the same wavelength or what?
C'est magnifique ; )
xxx
Pete Crompton
Tue 4th May 2010 19:55
ha!coincidence or.......... your pic showed up on the front page after I just posted this :-)
WOL picture lottery
WOL picture russian roulette
WOL picture bonzai? lets take bets.
Pete Crompton
Tue 4th May 2010 19:51
Hi Isobel, I enjoyed the 'strange comfort' atmosphere. I like the concept, it evoked a feeling of a gateway to someone by means of emoticon, if that makes sense. Its gentle, feels calm
"how strangely comforting to see you there, occupying space,breathing air"
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winston plowes
Thu 13th May 2010 14:41
We are living in a techno age arn't we. Could all this texting and icons stuff be replacing the old fashioned chatting up? Virtual dating... A bigger minefield than the real life equivalent I think. liked the sadnss in this one. It asks questions about 'is what we are all doing good for our hearts' win