Man On A Train
there’s a man
on a train
with his head
in his hands
I’m three seats behind
a man
on the train
with my head
in my hands
Comments
Really clever, short simple but saying so much. Agree absolutely with Shifa and Mortimer.
Jennifer
One of the finest pieces of poetry I've read in a while. So concise yet so powerful!
Thu 18th Jun 2020 09:07
This is absolutely brilliant Clive so much emotion in so few lines
Mortimer
Poet's Notes:
I wrote of a man with his head in his hands and later we see the man is me - the abstract metaphor of being sat three seats behind suggests a disconnect and a struggle to keep up (with life) hence being sat with head in hands.
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M.C. Newberry
Thu 18th Jun 2020 15:26
Certainly eye-catching in its content - creating a range of reactions
(and questions?) in the reader's mind.