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Pandora's lost Box

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Pandora’s lost box

 

To listen to their laughter

was almost too much

like listening to a row of dominos

crashing down in totally

the wrong order.

 

To listen to their laughter

was almost too much

like listening to the waves

from the nearby coastline

choking itself to death.

 

Two beautiful young women

swinging cigarettes and beer

with a miraculous flow of movement

that skilled jugglers would

struggled to contain

before they returned

to where they had come from.

 

Two beautiful young women

with rolled up cigarettes

trying to give the impression

of Greek goddesses

but in reality looked more like

Medusa and her twin sister.

 

And although they didn’t have

snakes dangling out of their hair

they had a deep fire

springing out of its redness

in the moonlight

which had men offering

them cigarettes

before they returned

to where they had come from

almost like they didn’t know what

they were doing.

 

And although in the morning

once the alcohol and cigarettes

had melted into the past

they will return to everyday life

like a pair of overstuffed vampires,

 

leaving,

 

leaving

 

leaving you glad you chose

to stay in the shadows

like a sun catcher to the moon

or Pandora who had lost her box.

 

 

 

(NB. Painting by my friend, Olga Gerke)

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Cate Greenlees

Sat 22nd May 2010 21:17

I enjoyed reading this Ansy... a modernistic and clever take on the theme.
Cate xx

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Francine

Sat 22nd May 2010 06:34

Yes, Many great lines in this Andy...

'like listening to a row of dominos
crashing down in totally
the wrong order.'

'trying to give the impression
of Greek goddesses'

'they will return to everyday life
like a pair of overstuffed vampires,'

And the ending too : )

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 22nd May 2010 00:59

Hi Andy,

Loved "a row of dominos crashing down in totally the wrong order." By the way, you don't happen to have their address by any chance? ;-)

Regards,
A.E.

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Isobel

Fri 21st May 2010 17:33

Modern day Pandoras! A lot different to the myth Andy but I bet they reek a lot of damage on the male populace - a very different take!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 21st May 2010 16:20

Andy, this is really good. I enjoyed it a lot. Your ideas and imagery are developing an 'Andy bite' that is becoming your 'style'. Lucky you! Ray's comments are always worth considering.

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Ray Miller

Thu 20th May 2010 19:35

Hell Andy. Liked the first two verses very much, the dominoes thing is fine, maybe "on" the nearby coastline?3rd verse I think you could end at "struggle to contain". 4th verse, how about:trying to impersonate Greek goddesses, in reality loking more like The Gorgons?I think it tails off a bit toward the end, but an interesting read, much enjoyed.

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Thu 20th May 2010 14:45

Brilliant! this paints a vivid picture to the minds eye, to me always a sign of successful piece of work.TC

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 20th May 2010 09:15

I love the line
"they will return to everyday life like
a pair of over stuffed vampires," and in fact what follows this is brilliant.
That painting is brilliant - is there any way to see mor eof her work?

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