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Brown Study

A gentleman will clamber

upon her fifth floor balcony

vault a chaise longue

and purposefully stride

into her brown study

all black suited asperity

 

she will feign to ignore him

and rather talk in asides

to the familiar on her shoulder

of succulent fruit and sultry jungles

thick lush furs of the frozen North

the abrasion of falling water

 

never ceasing to cook and sew

to knead and bake

to wind and weave

and polish her tales to perfection

 

his eyes may whisper imprecations

his tongue flick lightly

and thin manicured fingers

seek solace in petting

some unconsidered itch

 

she will talk in asides

to the familiar on her shoulder

she will not cease to cook and sew

and polish her tales to perfection

she will not cease to talk

 

of figurines of porcelain

orchids and chrysanthemum

velvet and vermilion

the timbre of grand pianos

and the ubiquity of moss

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Isobel

Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:28

I enjoyed this one - it isn't obvious but there are lots of unusual images that gel together well to paint a picture. For me it is a woman avoiding the issue...

A different situation entirely, but I was recently invited for coffee at the house of a friend, who proceeded to do her ironing and odd jobs whilst talking to me. I shan't go there again!

I particularly liked the 'ubiquity of moss' line.

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 1st Jun 2010 14:47

Heaven knows what would happen if we tried that on this site! The mind boggles!! I bet I would like the poet's work who you are "spoofing". Are you allowed to tell me who she is?

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Ray Miller

Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:53

Thanks Ann. It's a bit of a spoof, really.I wrote it for a competition on another site, where we all posted poems anonymously and the winner was the one who guessed correctly the most authors. So we ended up pretending to be each other. So I'm consciously emulating another's style. She was thrilled with it!

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 1st Jun 2010 11:21

I love this Ray. It seems to be about something or someone in particular, and so remains a mystery to me, but I like mysteries and the language is great. I love the last verse especially.

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