And finally...

I saw it on the news today;
they found my body.
I was wondering where I'd left it.
Two days it had been there,
all alone and fly blown.
In its death it served new life,
a multitude of little breaths.
I rather like the irony in that.
 
Two days is a lifetime for some,
the end of a lifetime for me.
Ignoble in the extreme,
to have all those people
looking at my death mask,
my final gift to the world.
Roll up, roll up; come see the show.
From unknown to newsworthy.
 
They say that they knew
that I was having problems.
They say that nothing is that bad.
They say a lot now it's over,
and I find that very sad.
They didn't say anything
Two days before; didn't want to offend.
Funny how two days can change everything.
 
 

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 13th Jul 2010 11:16

Excellent, Stephen. All the prior comment express it all - the idea is novel and beautifully worded. I liked the 'understanding' underlying 'didn't want to offend', currently a PC restriction we all find hard to bypass for more sympathetic human contact.

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Heather

Sun 11th Jul 2010 11:50

This is very good. You had me caught by the third line, so very powerful. You've got a great sense of tension and I love how you vary your sentences for the best of effects. The short ones really hit home and the long ones are heart-wrenching. This is so very well put together. There's nothing I'd suggest changing; my favourite read of the day.

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Bernadette Herbertson

Thu 8th Jul 2010 13:06

This is such a sad poem but the saddest thing is that it actually can be a stark reality of the finality of someones.life....

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 8th Jul 2010 09:59

"They say that nothing is that bad.
They say alot now it's over,
and I find that very sad.
They didnt say anything
two days before.."...nearly broke me in two! I was deeply moved by this piece..so poignantly you have expressed the distance between humans and how the bridges are sometimes hastily put up much too late...

<Deleted User> (7073)

Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:55

This is very sad, moving too in a very real and melancholy way.
TC

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:20

Strong piece Steven and just the right length. Wonderful irony and the thought of a multitude of little breaths is eye-catching.

<Deleted User> (8435)

Wed 7th Jul 2010 19:10

tha's pretty brutal..very sad too. i like the retrospective view.

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