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Keeping Time

The clocks melt

and merge into 

the fantasy they

always were, 

ever loyal troops

in the regiment

of the ultimate ruse,

the construct concocted

to render order

so that man 

feels enough before

the chaos and the luck, 

in a cosmos

that cares not 

for our fragile, fervidly

adhered-to plans,

but allows us 

to tame our confusion

with the illusion

of reason and rhyme, 

a comforting chime

to signal we've

succeeded once again

in keeping Time...

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Comments

Holden Moncrieff

Tue 26th Jul 2022 00:57

Thank you so much, Stephen and Candice, for your wonderful comments, I truly appreciate them! 😊

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Candice Reineke

Mon 25th Jul 2022 17:52

Love the irreverence in this one, Holden.

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 25th Jul 2022 17:07

Fantastic & Fantastical, Holden. 🌈

Holden Moncrieff

Mon 25th Jul 2022 16:40

Thank you so much for your very kind words, John, your support always means a lot to me! 😊

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John Botterill

Mon 25th Jul 2022 11:19

Brilliant, Holden. One of your finest in my view. Superbly well observed and constructed!

Holden Moncrieff

Sun 24th Jul 2022 21:39

Thank you so much, Carol and Stephen, for your lovely and encouraging comments, I am extremely grateful! 😊

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Stephen Gospage

Sun 24th Jul 2022 14:46

A fantastic poem, Holden. The opening reminded me of melting clocks in surrealist painting, which are both comforting and disturbing.

<Deleted User> (33719)

Sun 24th Jul 2022 02:23

Very interesting!

'to tame our confusion
with the illusion
of reason and rhyme,
a comforting chime' ~ worthy of reading quite a few times!
I like your poem very much Holden. 👍

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