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OUR OTHER LIVES

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Deeper than even the wood pigeon’s gloom, 
and always arriving just too late, 
in light less than a shuttered room, 
our other lives still wait. 

They wait for all that might have been 
had we but turned the other way. 
They have looked into the years and seen 
the emptiness of their days. 

Between the second glance and the first, 
though now uncertain of their names, 
they gather on platforms in autumnal mists 
and wait for trains that never came. 

They are walking in a room we left, 
still talking to another’s ghost, 
to this day they are still bereft - 
we did not stay and at what cost. 

Forever on a staircase they remain, 
above footsteps receding in the hall, 
their time will not come again 
that did not come at all. 

Somewhere between the then and now 
they look back at us and beckon, 
if only to learn what they always knew, 
theirs was the path not taken. 

Habitues of sequestered lanes, 
of sidings overgrown all along, 
they wait for us under mounting rain 
and look to find the time is wrong. 

They gaze in mirrors that give nothing back, 
no one being ever there. 
We might find them if we take 
the time to look, but find ourselves elsewhere. 

As bound to us as much as we 
to them, decisions we never made, 
they live their lives vicariously, 
forgetting they are dead. 

Their music is the dying fall, 
their season the autumn and its mists, 
those footsteps receding in the hall 
might be our own but we do not exist. 

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Tony Hill

Wed 26th Jul 2023 07:07

M.C. and Ray, thank you both for your very kind words. Unusually for me, the poem was written quickly, two short sittings if I remember correctly. What is and what might have been can sometimes hinge on very arbitrary decisions, decisions that may have lifelong ramifications. Another thought: the lives we might have led are as irretrievable as the lives we do lead, which become the past on the instant. I can’t be the person I was last week or even a minute ago because that person is gone for ever, lost in time. If that makes sense! Tony

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 25th Jul 2023 23:41

A mystical concept with a melancholy that resonates with our
thoughts and regrets about what is and what might have been.
A lot of care has gone into this construction and it shows. Well
done, that man!

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raypool

Tue 25th Jul 2023 22:31

I agree with all the above Tony, could not find one weak point as it consumed me with its power to persuade. Such a skill is hard to find in my opinion and the variety you employ says so much about the scope of thinking.

Ray

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Tony Hill

Tue 25th Jul 2023 21:08

Thank you for your very kind comments, Greg. I wanted the poem to be very autumnal and slightly late 19th century, with a bit of Edwardian thrown in for good measure. Tony

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Tony Hill

Tue 25th Jul 2023 21:03

Hi Stephen, so pleased you like the poem. I have always been fascinated by the idea of the lives we might have led had we turned left instead of right. A very personal poem. Tony

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Stephen Gospage

Tue 25th Jul 2023 20:40

Another wonderful poem, Tony. Every line crafted with such care. What might have been, but for whom? Them or us?

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Greg Freeman

Tue 25th Jul 2023 20:31

Deeply profound poem, Tony, with such a mournful, melancholy air. A tour de force. I've just looked up Frost's 'The Road Not Taken', and realised how different your development of his theme is. Bravo.

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