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A loss of life & words

I lost my Brother, and my poetry went with him

Words replaced by a bottomless hollow

Knowing he has not one more tomorrow 

 

The words I needed drifted away

Hiding from the light of day

Wallowing in a sea of grey 

The sea, which drowns us all

When someone dear passes away

 

He liked a drink, and liked a fag

But was the best brother I could have had

'A good looking lad' back in his day 

And had "the ol' blue eyes'

To do it his way 

 

Farts in the face,  and many a dead leg!

If I believed in God, how I would beg

To go back to those days

When he was just my big brother 

And I looked up to him

 

Like I looked up to no other 

 

Rest easy Paul

My Brother ❤️

Grieffamily

◄ The Flickering Of A Candle

Lazy B ►

Comments

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Patricia Ziel

Mon 3rd Jun 2024 22:36

It's been a while, but the loss remains. So sorry for your loss. A wonderful tribute to your brother.

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Stephen Gospage

Fri 4th Aug 2023 17:15

So sorry for your loss, Stephen. My condolences. You found the poetry that you needed, as we all will, I'm sure.

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Stephen Atkinson

Fri 4th Aug 2023 14:39

Thank you everyone for the lovely, kind comments. And, yes, M.C. that's all we can do, remember them with a smile, and we had lots of smiles! Thanks again x

Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Thu 3rd Aug 2023 17:27

Best wishes Stephen.
💓

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Tom

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 21:46

A beautiful poem Stephen and so sorry to hear about your brother.

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kJ Walker

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 19:38

Sorry for your loss Stephen.

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Tony Hill

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 18:17

Sorry to hear of your loss, Stephen. Tony

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Greg Freeman

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 17:45

Very sorry for your loss, Stephen. Well done for expressing it in such a way. The poetry will return, maybe is returning already.

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jennifer Malden

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 16:09

Liked the comment from M C N, Do not weep for what is lost, but instead smile for what has been. This is comforting when 'the bottomless hollow' starts to fill up a little. Beautiful poem.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 14:58

Having lost my brother in the recent past, I can identify with
this. My own left home early to become a boy soldier while
I was still a sprog and memories of his coming home on leave
over those years stay with me still. His arrival was always
looked forward to with eager anticipation and his departure
always regretted. His final departure from this life was sudden
and involved me as his executor. Hard in so many ways.
Chin up, SA...he would have wanted you to carry on as if he
were still around. As the saying goes: Do not weep for what
is lost, but instead smile for what has been.

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John Coopey

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 14:54

A wonderfully heartfelt glimpse into your loss and pain, Stephen.

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Clare

Wed 2nd Aug 2023 13:51

I am so sorry for your loss. 😢. A beautiful poem from the heart. 💕

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