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THE DRESSING ROOM AT THE FLORAL HALL HORNSEA

Below the waterline was the dressing room

like a world war one dugout

where we found traces of previous occupation

the tired and cast off detritus of musicians:

a discarded shirt, dirty towel,

yesterday's Daily Mirror coiled and thrust  

into a waste paper basket,

drawers of hair grips. old smudged tissues, half - used makeup,

cigarette stubs in a tin ashtray

the faint scent of success

reflected by a long run of mirrors fringed with bulbs. 

 

We feathered the nest:

Mr.Perfect the trumpet player quickly disinfecting the area

disgusted at such breaches of etiquette

polished the underside of his patent dress shoes

commandeered the solitary coat hook remaining

the others using edges of doors and rails,

the singers inevitably in an upgraded adjacent room. 

 

We began to test slides reeds valves practice drum pad

dressed for the evening dance

spilling out into the trench corridor and over the top

at the Floral Hall Hornsea. 

 

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raypool

Wed 23rd Aug 2023 16:13

Thank you for reading and liking this Tom.

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raypool

Wed 23rd Aug 2023 10:50

Thanks for the message Graham! This is what happens when you have wrung out all the glamour from old shirts and towels I suppose. I am back in the poetry saddle again and it's very gratifying. I appreciate your support and to feel able to contribute after a period in the doldrums.

Ray

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 22nd Aug 2023 17:58

Your explanation almost as good as the piece Ray! A classic!

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raypool

Tue 22nd Aug 2023 16:42

Thanks for reading and liking this Helene.

I'm very glad that this poem drew so much attention from those who have mercifully not had to travel far distances in a day to prepare for such events as I have described. The other penalty was to be offered a lack of food and drink so often too. But why should I be bitter? at least I got a poem or two out of such experiences. I think poets should draw from any sources where they feel inspired. So many thanks for your welcome comments Stephen, Graham, Greg ( news on the way regarding such a venture!), John Gilbert Ellis, there is a certain poignancy in the faded glamour implied by a dressing room, although it is testament to the truth that one is only as good as one's last performance, equally valid for those who have made it on the ladder. I feel glad you have tasted the atmosphere! John, Betjeman forever! a master of drawing scenery in the mind. One further point: this particular gig with the Joe Loss Orchestra involved the trombone player driving off with all the band's money (inadvertently) pissed of course,and having to drive back ten miles so that we could all pick up our wages!

All the best and thanks again for the appreciation! Ray

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John Coopey

Mon 21st Aug 2023 23:14

Marvellous imagery, Ray. A gem to brighten up Hornsea. I agree with Greg about the title. Made me think of "Clash went the billiard balls at the Clerkenwell Social Saloon".

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John Gilbert Ellis

Sun 20th Aug 2023 22:47

‘The faint scent of success’, what a great line. Took me to a place I didn’t know, really good poem.

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Greg Freeman

Sun 20th Aug 2023 13:41

This is the real thing, Ray, as I've always told you! The title alone draws the reader in. Time for a collection of such memories.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 20th Aug 2023 11:01

We can smell it, we can hear it, we can almost touch it Ray! One of your best I think!

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Stephen Gospage

Sun 20th Aug 2023 09:03

You conjure up something wonderful here, Ray. Overflows with atmosphere and memory.

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