Isobel

Flashing Blue Lights

by Isobel

Sunday 22nd August 2010 3:28 pm (first posted Saturday 21st August 2010 7:42 pm)

Flashing blue Lights

You pull me over

Bawl me out

Driving without due care and attention

A danger to all around me

Guess I was pushing my luck

Cutting up a copper

On a roundabout…

‘Wing mirrors are made for looking in

Sat Navs an idle distraction’

I listen to the lecture

Shake in my boots

Bat my eyelids

The hint of a tear

All pouting apologetic lips

‘I was just trying to find my way home…’

You melt

Candy floss on a rigid stick

Then send me on my way

Except it doesn’t really end there

I’m still careering round roundabouts

A danger to all around me

One day I’ll knock myself down

There’ll be no pieces to pick up

Just a dark smudge

On an asphalt road to nowhere

No flashing blue lights

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Comments

Isobel

Wed 25th Aug 2010 18:15

I would agree with you Ann but direct speech rarely makes for good poetry. I paraphrased what the copper said which is why I didn't use full speech marks. It works better for me but I hear what you are saying. Glad you liked the poem - it was a bit of a different one for me. x

Ann Foxglove

Wed 25th Aug 2010 08:21

Hi Iz - I like this, a very "immediate" read, I esp like the last verse. Not sure if the cop would say "Sat Navs an idle distraction’" though. Maybe he'd say "Sat Navs are a waste of time" or something.

<Deleted User> (7073)

Tue 24th Aug 2010 14:53

I think the second half of the last verse has extra depth and adds a poignant spin.
Love TC X

Andy N

Mon 23rd Aug 2010 08:18

enjoyed this isobel.. excellent stuff as always.. interested to see you wrote this quickly (I'm currently in that blank phase at the moment) good to see last thursday at the book launch - has being a while hasn't it? x

Francine

Sun 22nd Aug 2010 16:24

I can relate to the feeling in this Isobel...
I like the 'fast write' spontaneity of it.
The spelling can be either way, and I like the way you spelled it (originally) as it gives the allusion to more than one interpretation - which is definitely your style ; )

Isobel

Sun 22nd Aug 2010 15:27

Yes it was a fast write cynthia - I get very rare flashes like that after weeks of a dry spell. Ball was a definite spelling mistake but I love your interpretation and being balled out sounds like a lorra fun! x

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 22nd Aug 2010 11:55

Another good one, Isobel. It feels like a 'fast write', but is very entertaining and pushes a lot of social buttons. Not sure whether to laugh or cry at the 'message' therein, since the 'driver' is not likely to be the only 'dark smudge on an asphalt road'. Too bad the copper wasn't a woman, or maybe the copper was....! BTW, is 'ball out' a deliberate ploy for making fun of masculinity, instead of 'bawl out'?

Isobel

Sat 21st Aug 2010 23:38

Ha - I've obviously set myself up for an awful lot of backchat here...
I think you should write a poem called 'Dashing Red Lights' Dave - and you give a whole new meaning to the expression 'putting your foot down'...

Dave Bradley

Sat 21st Aug 2010 23:33

Love it. But next time there are any comments from the back seat on my driving it'll get a mention (-;

Isobel

Sat 21st Aug 2010 21:34

Well actually Banksy, I think statistics would beg to differ...
Ha ha - this is based on a true story but I only drive like that when I'm lost - as I was on this particular night your honour...

<Deleted User> (7212)

Sat 21st Aug 2010 20:01

yeah - wimmin drivers eh ??
gotta love em ;)

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