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Biting the Bullet

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( A poem for Dave Bradley's challenge)

 

If only life were a matrix,

the best moments freeze framed,

caught in the film of an eye,

the heat of one touch,

and all the bullets side-stepped

extracted, taken out

plopped like teeth

on a silver salver;

no gas and air

no gaping gum,

just a vacuum

packed

with all the precious time.

 

In real life the bullets reign,

cold metal comfort

to a busted lip;

home truths roost

like tumours on the tongue

to burst and force their bile.

Bullets bitten are rarely sweet,

swallowed whole,

lie heavy on the soul.

 

And all the heroes

are un-chosen,

ricocheted through life

in the blinking of an eye,

smaller than life

just flesh and blood

prick and they shall bleed

poison and they shall die.

Bullet

◄ Flashing Blue Lights

Breathing ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 5th Sep 2010 10:42

Amazing. Your brain must work constantly, storing fragments of ideas, impressions, relationships etc. until you want to access them for a particular 'thesis'. Your love of language shines through. I also think your intellectual experience with French is a telling factor in your work - the discipline of another language. I loved Latin.

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Lynn Dye

Sun 5th Sep 2010 09:18

Absolutely brilliant, Isobel. xx

<Deleted User> (7073)

Sun 5th Sep 2010 00:28

I love your thought processes involved with this, and the way you juxtaposition avoiding the bullet with actually biting it. Was a fan of the first matrix. XX

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Cate Greenlees

Sat 4th Sep 2010 06:15

Excellent Isobel! I love doing these themed poems.... I purposely didnt look at anyone elses until mine was written in case I was influenced by other ideas, but we are all so different in our styles and take on things, which is what makes it so interesting.
Cate xx

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Rachel Bond

Fri 3rd Sep 2010 22:44

really good this Isobel some smart ideas, i like time/space theories. brilliant x

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jane wilcock

Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:20

great poem and true as well!

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Isobel

Fri 3rd Sep 2010 19:32

Thanks for your comments folks. Yep - it was another quick write - I'm getting better at it!

I was trying to convey the idea that before we ever bite the bullet, often we have to wake up to an unpleasant reality. That is a hard thing to do - much nicer sometimes to bury your head in the sand. We are all heroes in that life dumps shit on us all the time and we are always having to pick ourselves up and carry on.

The very rare moments of true happiness that you get inbetween all the dross are what keep us going. That's the vacuum that it would be nice to freeze so we could enjoy it over again and it would have no end.

<Deleted User> (7212)

Fri 3rd Sep 2010 13:25

Yes, we are all flesh & blood + mortal - very well observed.
Dave - can the words "heroes" and "football" even co-exist in the same sentence ??

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Dave Bradley

Fri 3rd Sep 2010 07:59

You mean Neo can die? Oh no, surely not.

Remarkable and powerful, Izz, especially in the time available. Yes - often when heroes are 'chosen'(England footballers?) they let us down, and everyday heroes get little recognition.

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Andy N

Thu 2nd Sep 2010 23:57

nice one, Isobel.. powerful stuff indeed... When I get chance - I am going to write this on this title.. My mind is a little elsewhere at the moment (as you may have guessed from my last poem) xx

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Francine

Thu 2nd Sep 2010 23:41

Mmmm... My favourite, which says it all:
'Bullets bitten are rarely sweet,
swallowed whole,
lie heavy on the soul.'



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Rachel McGladdery

Thu 2nd Sep 2010 22:48

I bloody love this...'bullets bitten are rarely sweet' and 'and all the heroes are unchosen...' are inspired. Bravo missus.

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