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The Moment

The moment

when little person pops out

of wife's undercarriage

is so quick.

Nature is so slick,

the drop of a jaw,

no more

and it's done -

a life has begun.

 

It's too fast

The moment should last.

I want to hold the moment,

examine it this way and that,

feel it for all it incredibly is.

 

But rather than hold the moment

I hold my wife

and that is a moment too.

 

And then in another moment

I hold the tiny baby,

the biggest fact in the world,

and realise that I

(good old peaceful me)

have changed in a moment

and could kill anyone

who tried to harm her.

 

Can I add that this is about the precise moment of birth, from a male point of view. To head off missiles from any mums out there, I fully realize that 9 months is a very long time, especially if it’s hot later on, and that childbirth itself can be long and difficult and that we men know nothing about pain (well, not very much).

◄ Biting the Bullet. Prize follow-up to Pandora

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Cate Greenlees

Wed 8th Sep 2010 14:58

Oh God this could only have been written by a man! Love it Dave, and the sentiment it invokes, but Ive never known nature be quick or slick!
However the protective feeling you have for your newborn is beautifully drawn.
Cate xx

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Andy N

Wed 8th Sep 2010 08:18

the note at the end was a wise move, dave but tone wise, the piece is a tender and soft, gentle and understated (at least to me).

love it, m8

(I am still working on my bite to bullet piece - you do realise there is a track by Machinehead who are a really loud rock band called this don't you??? lol)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 7th Sep 2010 19:37

I'm glad you added the footnote; I was ready to condemn all men to sheer idiocy. It is a lovely poem about an incredible 'moment'

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Isobel

Tue 7th Sep 2010 12:45

It's a shame you added that footnote Dave - I was looking forward to lambasting you! Yes - a quick delivery is the best a woman can ask for - there is nothing quite like that moment when all the pain is over though and you are handed this perfect being. You must be very in touch with your feminine side to understand that - the poet in you maybe.

I love the protective note that you end on - raw nature at its best. x

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