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Under Pressure (a frivolous piece)

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Somewhere
out there
beyond the grey
there is yellow
orange, gold,
or so I’m told…
A circle, a closed loop
a hoop, a disk, a ring
a very precious thing,
the most common non polygon,
metaphysically and righteously speaking
'Gone, Gone, Gone, Go-o-o-one…'
This ball of molten gas and fire,
I think it’s called a sun
yes a sun, a sun it is,
I know it’s there

cos I remember it…

Long, long ago
I lay on grass
grass undefiled
by rabbit poop or child
eyes closed, limbs stretched
I felt its heat
steal upon me,
hot kissed
brown skin
sweet delicious sin
sizzled and steamed
my juices streamed,
or did I dream?

This ghostly sphere haunts me,
flashes of spectral light
through gauzy cloud,
this cumulus nimbus limbo shroud.
The bar’s too high
the isobar’s too low,
the ultra-violet rays won’t flow
someone grab that spotty bow
and strangle Michael Fish!
‘Too much low pressure
pushing down on me,
it feels like Autumn
just sat right down for tea.
Feeling so freezing,
this Ozone
don’t need no cleaning.
Feeling so freezing,
my tits just eclipsed,
under pressure!’

That sun
I know it’s out there,
somewhere out there
watching me,
that Unidentified Fleeting Orb,
laughing at us all,
the damp smalls,
the bronchial chest,
the D deficient breast…

One day it will rise again
cos I’m a believer
oh yes, I’m a believer
and,
whilst others peg out clothes
or wash the car,
magnifying glass in hand
I shall burn down
their houses made of straw
grab myself a great chainsaw,
a bit of bic, a touch of veet,
perform an epilatory feat,
lay waste to privet, boundary bush
and then,
all glory to on high
strip naked
and give the neighbours
something to write home about!

◄ Crafting Your Own

The Original Oak ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (7164)

Thu 28th Oct 2010 11:39

Under pressure! I hate that song!
Your poem however is absolutely superb Isobel. A very worthy performance piece which i'm sure would go down well in several places on the circuit.
Brilliant fun and just as good a read as it is to listen to. Well done! You are so good at this :-)
xx

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 27th Oct 2010 20:24

Wow! why say more!!

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Isobel

Wed 27th Oct 2010 19:33

Yes - it is a posh Wigan accent - I spent too long down your neck of the woods and it got tainted...

Whaddaya mean self deprecation - what makes you think that isn't me up there in the cowboy hat?

I am more of a performance poet Steve - I just love the buzz of a stage and I enjoy the mischief in this piece. If I ever make it famous, I'd like to do it in the rain to a massive audience with a support band and I'd do a partial strip at the end - nothing seedy of course - just a doffed cardigan and a bit of fun for the audience. You'd really need loud music to make it work though - and everybody really tanked up - and a shift of focus away from the written word...

<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 27th Oct 2010 18:17

I think you should go the whole hog - back, sack & crack :)
great poem BTW -I love the rhythm
Also David Bowie - some of his lyrics are brill (he's a great poet) - "Drive in Saturday" is one of my favourites. xx

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Dave Bradley

Wed 27th Oct 2010 16:56

Excellent. It worked well as a performance piece and now at last here it is. It's fun - it is also good stuff. Lots of nice things happening with words and rhythm in there.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 27th Oct 2010 16:27

Hehehe - fab! Never heard your voice before - sounds really clear, like it :) LOVE tits eclipsing under pressure :D :D

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 27th Oct 2010 16:19

Brill! (It's a lovely sunny day here - so I'll expect you round later with your flame thrower shall I?) xx

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Isobel

Wed 27th Oct 2010 16:06

Glad you like it Francine/Gus - yes it's a brill song. I envy Annie Lennox getting the opportunity to sing with David Bowie - would love to be able to do that. The poem was a bit of fun - inspired by a freezing cold, wet August up in the North West of England - we get quite different weather from you southerners and other foreigners.Thanks to my friend Dave for splicing all the music up - I'm sure I gave him a head ache. I promise to fit my words to the music and not the music to my words, next time...x

ps damp smalls? you've got me wondering gus!

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Gus Jonsson

Wed 27th Oct 2010 16:03

This far from frivolous... this is power packed ..love it .

just one thing ...Stripping Naked for he neighbours... its me with the damp smalls Iso...

Once again superb... you'll be needing a roadie soon... with these vocals and harmonics..

Well done

Gus xx

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Francine

Wed 27th Oct 2010 15:57

FINALLY !!!!!
LOVE IT - YOU are so funny!
So many great lines in this - flows really well, and I LOVE this song!

xxx

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