My dear
You look so small
Beneath it all
The curving arc of life
The world
And all we know.
Troubled, taken in pain,
Your heart’s refrain
Is to battle hard
Against it.
But just let go.
For all we know
Life and love and everything!
That’s our eternal span.
Enjoy it while you can.
For dust is all and dust is - us
My master.
The heavens are made from it!
I really like this Ann. Really resonated with me, the week I've had.
A metaphysical moment indeed! Of course it is. It is a lovely, sincere poem, Ann, resonating with thinking people. The last line is superb. Anyone who grows older with all mental faculties intact must have such searching thoughts about the meaning of life. Organized religion capitallizes on this human bent, forcing set ideas into our psyches from babyhood, often leaving little space for us to develop thinking for ourselves. Since 'eternity is but a moment', surely it might be 'this moment'. So, I figure, eternity is exactly what you make it, moment by moment.
Thanks for comments. Just a coincidence re title Dave, I'm sure the "we are dust" idea is in loads of poems, tho I did enjoy your poem too! I wrote it very quickly and bits of it don't make sense (if the span of life is eternal why do we have to enjoy it while we can?) And the title was just the only word from the poem that could have been a title really.
Enjoyed this, Ann. Were you inpired by mine or is it coincidence?
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Tue 2nd Nov 2010 22:35
Thank heavens for Mr Sheen ;)
Are you having a metaphysical moment Ann? Do you know much about the Metaphysical poets? might be worth a look, Henry Vaughan being my personal pick of them, Win x
Dust as we are, the immortal spirit grows... William Wordsworth. I wonder what he would make of WOL? Nice one Ann. Win x
hi ann this is so thought provoking and im not sure what i make of it but it certainly says to me that we must remember that life is very precious and we must enjoy whilst we can as like they say dust to dust...my lovely companion cat felix went to heaven 24/oct he was 13 yr old i miss him so much the place is not the same without him.. ben says thank you for your comment and he is glad you liked his story and he giggled when you said your cat enjoyed it as well..bless him eh ...bernie and ben xxx
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Chris Dawson
Wed 10th Nov 2010 08:31
Some interesting ideas in this Ann, but it feels, to me, very much like a first draft.
Cx