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What am I Knitting?

Tune in the radio for news of the children!

 

Last night I slept on a soiled mattress

and woke as Mrs Somebody-or-Other

wearing this hat and second-hand clothing,

my throat filled with unfamiliar language;

a stuffed and bandaged museum exhibit,

temples throbbing to the boom-boom-boom.

 

This sausage no longer tastes of sausage

(they used to call me the open door).

Now all sorts enter this room without  knocking:

the stethoscope whisper, the bloody samples;

take seven from a hundred - what am I knitting?

Soup in the kitchen and poisoned apples -

how many cooks keep the doctor away?

 

Evenings we loll in an air-raid shelter;

tea and biscuits, Bingo on Saturday,

waiting for the humming to end or commence.

These dreams are not mine! Not mine

these teeth and breasts and dresses,

these spectacles that will not rest on my ears.

 

They should be home by now!

 

◄ The Death Of Me

venomous ►

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Lynn Dye

Fri 19th Nov 2010 10:25

Only just come across this one, Ray. I think it is really good in that it seems to conjure up what it must have been like living through the war. Enjoyed it.

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Elaine Booth

Mon 15th Nov 2010 16:52

Of all poems concerning war and rememberance so far on the site this month, I find this to be the best, to my taste. It conveys something of what it must have felt like rather than generic-sounding phrases that can be written when looking at war from a distance of time. Very difficult not to be hackneyed when writing on this topic - it has been truly done to death but you have brought some freshness to it here.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 13th Nov 2010 14:14

It's good, Ray, very insightful because it could refer to almost any experience under stress. I really liked 'my throat filled with unfamiliar languages' like living in a multi-cultural council estate. I'm not sure we should qualify our intents. IMO, the first and last lines open the poem like the covers of a book, the focal point, the most important information.

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Ray Miller

Fri 12th Nov 2010 19:28

It's about the wanderings of a mind in decline, Greg. There was a reason for separating the first and last lines but I've forgotten what it was! I really have! Ha, Ha!

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Greg Freeman

Fri 12th Nov 2010 08:09

Wartime, Blitz, doodlebugs? Among other things, incl the National Health Service. Wondered about the exclamation marks on the first and last lines; last line feels very powerful. Enjoyed this, Ray

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