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Beziers

Did you read of the farmer near Beziers

whose entire grape crop -

all thirty-five tons -

was stolen overnight by a gang

with a mechanical harvester?

Did you remember how we bent

 

and ached for the grapes, swollen

and pendulous, bruised

like love-bitten breasts,

sweating and swaying before us?

How at night we poured

ourselves into each other

 

to the rhythm of crickets;

the Languedoc women

wore dark bandannas and clicked

their tongues in mock disapproval

when they learnt we were unwed.

"C'est la mode!" they supposed

and blessed our unborn children

 

asleep in the abandoned college.

The mayor of the village

was called Bruno, a Communist

who begrudged us free electric.

I quoted Lenin's famous maxim

and he drove us to Beziers

 

the following Saturday:

me in my yellow kerchief,

polka-dot blouse and fedora hat;

you in your thin peasant dress.

We bet who'd get the best proposals,

finally opting for a sauna

with the handsome Catalans.

 

Oh, Jesus, you would whisper

in your soft Geordie accent

as I bit into vendange tardive.

You clawed and kissed the icon

at your neck before we burst

into Rabelaisian giggles.

 

Do you mourn - just a little -

that the fruit's no more felt, even 

by those with dishonest intentions?

 

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Ray Miller

Thu 18th Nov 2010 14:55

Thanks, Greg. If you were a dirty old man you'd be in the sauna with the Catalans.

Thanks, Laura. Glad you liked it. That cigarette has done summat to your face.

Thank you so much, Darren. Had to look up phonology.

Cynthia, you're too kind. Actually, several people told me to ditch or radically alter the first verse. But I was stubborn and I'm glad it's appreciated.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 18th Nov 2010 11:18

This is fabulous. The opening question is a real hook that just swallows the readers in, and then your following lines make them lick lips with sheer pleasure. In addition to the fine comments already here, the run-over from stanza to stanza gives the poem forward energy too. IMO, this is top class.

darren thomas

Thu 18th Nov 2010 10:54

Once again Ray a choice of language that appears deliberate with its smooth sounding phonology and that's before you get to the sentiment and meaning contained within each stanza. Good stuff, indeed.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 18th Nov 2010 09:49

Wow. Hugely evocative - I could almost feel the heat in the air. I found that second verse/stanza/thing really sensual and erotic - as it is supposed to be really. Really like the story-like quality to it. Sad note to end on.

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Greg Freeman

Thu 18th Nov 2010 09:38

Really enjoyed this poem, Ray, and its Rabelaisian glow. I hope it doesn't mark me down as a dirty old man to say the lines I liked best were "How at night we poured /ourselves into each other / to the rhythm of crickets."

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