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Daily Battle

Human beings aren't hominid cattle.

Each one has their daily battle.

 

This woman's blind, that man is deaf.

Each one has their daily battle.

 

He needs escape, she wants marriage.

They too have their daily battle.

 

A couple grieving for soldier son.

They hate the word, but have their battle.

 

He has a stammer, she hates her weight.

Please don't mock their daily battle.

 

She loathes her job, he just lost his.

They plod on through their daily battle.

 

A single dad, so determined.

Says out loud, it's a daily battle.

 

The old, the ill and those who care.

Hospital life is a daily battle

 

Sports stars desp'rate to stay on top.

Their glam'rous life a daily battle.

 

Manager handling awkward staff.

Rails against fate for her daily battle.

 

Booze and drugs are easy options.

If you're losing the daily battle

 

The poet searches for just the right word.

A small matter, but – a daily battle.

 

So far as I can work out, this breaks several of the rules for ghazals, not least because it isn't about love or separation. But it's an interesting form so I've (loosely) followed it. A pseudo-ghazal perhaps.

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Comments

<Deleted User> (7789)

Sat 4th Dec 2010 14:11

Life is indeed a battle on so many fronts. In fact, I might even need to go for that easy option in a short while!

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Cate Greenlees

Sat 4th Dec 2010 10:18

Interesting Dave. Im not familiar with Ghazal format, and would have thought you were experimenting with repetition if Winston hadnt put up a comment. You`ll have to tell me more about it when we next cross paths at a venue!
Cate xx

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winston plowes

Fri 3rd Dec 2010 19:16

Dave, Can you tag this poem with Ghazal please. Cheers Win x

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winston plowes

Fri 3rd Dec 2010 13:24

Hi Dave, Interesting Ghazal style poem this. The differences between this and a classical Urdu ghazal are only important if they are important to you (For me it satisfies 4 of the 8 criteria)I like it. It has an interesting refrain and comments.

I think generally modern ghazal writters have largely moved away from the traditional subjucts of lost love etc so no prob there. In fact if it is to survive I think that this diversification is essential. Win

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