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Beyond the Garden #4

Who am I?

I know that I do not know

who I am and

that is all I know

But this is jungle.

How did I know that,

but I do know

and this a tree,

this a body,

My Body!

nice body,

feels GOOD.

How'd it come?

don't know,

in the jungle

all I know is

this is all I know

I remember nothing

expect nothing

am nothing

 

I look past the tree

and see

something.

A …....

cottage.

I know it's special,

it's not like here,

everything has a place

in those straight lines.

 

What is all this stuff?

I know this is wrapping paper,

know those are presents.

That is string.

New things, somehow old.

I wrap the presents

which I've never done before

but my hands know how.

 

My feet move along the path

towards the cottage.

The light brightens

trees thin

There is a …...

hedge.

That is a …

gate.

I am in the ….........

garden.

I am.........

naked

I pick up and put on the....

clothes

I open the presents

 

which the man from the jungle brought me

 

and gaze on them with wonder

 

then take them back

 

into my cottage.

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Dali

Mon 21st Feb 2011 22:26

This is one of those poems that requires one's attention with every new line, makes you hungry for what's next. And yet it's very personal

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winston plowes

Sun 6th Feb 2011 10:55

things have become far more philosophical. I wonder if this is the end and am I supposed to have gleaned some impressive great answer from it ? I haven't, but it has been an interesting journey. I am reminded of a film I saw last year "Where the Wild Things are" Big beasts / Childrens story / dreams / different worlds / emotional conflict. (incidentally I hated the film) enjoyed the story Dave and it proves that a series of posts can work well and be engaging on WOL. I will now go back and read some of the comments, maybe you have left some messages there yourself to illuminate me? I have not looked so far ... here goes

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Elaine Booth

Wed 2nd Feb 2011 19:23

These poems are really special, Dave. Seems to be more of a nod to a Garden of Eden theme here. Like them a lot and again, as last time, agree with Laura.

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Andy N

Wed 2nd Feb 2011 08:11

I agree with Laura here, this is defo a collection coming here (if that's your plan) and I particularly love the charm and the innocence in this piece.. top stuff m8, Andy N

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Tom Harding

Tue 1st Feb 2011 21:34

Love the voice in this. The poem has natural confidence. Really nice.

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Tue 1st Feb 2011 21:16

hmmm he didn't spend too long in the jungle did he?..really enjoyed your word use here..and as always you have me thinking. :)

<Deleted User> (7212)

Tue 1st Feb 2011 20:39

Love this Dave.

have you thought - BTW - what a great comp. idea this would make ? ie - everyone's take on what is out there, beyond the jungle !!

- exciting, n'est-ce pas?

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Laura Taylor

Tue 1st Feb 2011 13:50

Am loving this series Dave...still think you could really put together a little book/pamphlet or something with them. This is like being told stories as a kid. I could really see this being read out loud by you.

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