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Love Poem

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Poor clouds hanging down

Like damp clothes on a line.
Inside a grey hotel room

On Euston Road
Rereading a copy of Ovid 
And trying to recollect

The year 1998 when we first met.
Outside the air is cold.
The sky is moving quickly,
The wind tugging 
The last of the day along.

Nothing is defined.
We’re always becoming,
En route between two points 
Ending in destruction.


The first casualty is the body,
The venturer turns cartographer.

Your naked,
The window pouring light on you.
I cross the hilt and
Step behind the velvet curtain
Where magicians compare techniques,
Hands running through 
Every last trick
Till all myth explodes.

You rise and stand by the window
And look down upon the wind blown street,
Considering for the first time
Of moving away from me.

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Nash

Fri 5th Aug 2011 08:50

gorgeous

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Elaine Booth

Thu 3rd Feb 2011 19:33

Another very enjoyable & evocative poem. "The wind tugging / The last of the day along" - Just wondered about trying: "the wind tugging along / the last of the day" Maybe. You know best what effect you are aiming for.

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Ray Miller

Thu 3rd Feb 2011 08:49

These lines are terrific.
The first casualty is the body,
The venturer turns cartographer.

I'd say that these images conflict more than a little:

Poor clouds hanging down

The sky is moving quickly,
The wind tugging

You're naked? I like that penultimate verse very much.

The last two lines jar.

Considering for the first time
Of moving away from me.

Better without "of"?

Nice poem, and thanks for your comment on my poem the other day.








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