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In the time it takes
to grow an inch of grey
Tightly sprung curls unravel
hanging loose as day falls away
In the tangled mass
strewn on a parquet floor
the image of a lover
who is no more... my heart gladdens
In the radiance
of my own reflection
'mirror mirror on the wall
who is the fairest of them all'
clever stuff, janet.. what i feel has pretty well been covered in the comments already but i think the last stanza in particular is very, very clever... top stuff, Janet x
clever stuff, janet.. what i feel has pretty well been covered in the comments already but i think the last stanza in particular is very, very clever... top stuff, Janet x
<Deleted User> (7164)
Sun 6th Mar 2011 12:24
Thanks for comments :-)
Isobel - the title is meant to be flippant in the sense of the number of snips to shape a new style and is also the number of syllables in each line of the verses :-)
Julian - what are you up to?!
Cynthia - you're not far out at all in your interpretation except the bit about growing an inch of grey being devastating. My hair grows too quickly and false colours are expensive :-)
This is a much shortened version of an older poem i wrote about my marriage break up of 8 years.x
Janet, I'm still not sure what this is all about. I don't see 'cutting hair', more like 'losing it' in 'the time it takes to grow an inch of grey'. I think it is far more devastating than just a snip job. And the bold beauty embraced by the final lines, the bravery and confidence, is very gripping. And I'm probably 'out to lunch' with this idea.
Speak for yourselves. In my case, such a shame it does not grow back!
Perhaps that is why I have managed to "let go" so many lovers?
This reminds me of that South Pacific song 'I'm going to wash that man right out of my hair'. There is something very therepeutic about shedding hair - it does lighen the soul in some odd way - such a shame it all has to grow back.
I didn't like the title - would have preferred something more tied into the letting go of a lover or the past. I do like the idea being linked to the cutting of hair though. x
<Deleted User> (7164)
Fri 4th Mar 2011 14:25
Thanks for pointing out the typo Laura - sorted now :-)
a last verse eh? ah but that's probably because you like even numbers. I prefer odds ;-)
Thanks for comment.x
Love that second verse Janet, espec ially the second and fourth lines.
Should that be 'an' rather than 'and' in the first verse?
One small thing...feels to me like there's a last verse missing...
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<Deleted User> (7164)
Wed 9th Mar 2011 13:25
Thanks Steve and Andy ;-)