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Cerebratorium

We all have rooms;

great whale bellies that echo, calcium deficient,

with Spectres clutching heads,

waltzing in nausea.

 

In these rooms, we are a spectacle;

too solid and growing, but bent

from lack of sun -

we watch our feet all day,

walking at eye level

and cuss.

 

Sometimes in these rooms,

 we are the marrow;

cement oozing from our pores,

glazing our eyes like marble,

rib cages embracing our skin,

and a window’s latch piercing

our lung within.

Too tight is the outside,

and too loose is what is in;

painting these rooms,

a postcard yellow.

 

Some rooms, like lovers,

are places we need for sleep.

Up to our knees, we try to believe,

a soft press of dark red,

and a thumb up to a mouth.

But we pout, snatching covers -

Tulip tourettes - and everything comes undone.

 

Sometimes we have to be

the only one to have a room,

yes, the only one.

 

 

 

 

 

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melanie coady

Wed 9th Mar 2011 11:47

really enjoyed it hun x

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Rachel Bond

Mon 7th Mar 2011 15:28

marianne, i am re wording my comment as i said that you had inspired my last poem, which whilst its true that your words gave the flavour of my last write, its not fair to say you inspired me writing about anything ugly...it wasnt about you ;) im sure you know what i mean.

i saw a film once in which a professor described one of his rooms as a 'masturbatorium' it was the only funny line in the whole thing.

we are indeed a spectacle. i love this poem

Philipos

Sun 6th Mar 2011 18:25

I really do like a poem that stretches the mind from the title to the last letter - some wonderful metaphores here

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Francine

Sun 6th Mar 2011 15:55

I have to agree with most comments...
I like the idea of 'rooms'... compartments.
Your words impress upon the reader an interesting series of feelings and thoughts!


Especially liked:

'waltzing in nausea'
'bent from lack of sun'
'Tulip tourettes - and everything comes undone'

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winston plowes

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:36

Do you remember the Numskulls in the Beano? More seriously another classic Marianne. Well done. Win x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:33

Fabulous. Amazingly novel, and completely 'sucking in' the reader to follow your metaphorical ideas.

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:30

Marianne I thought this was one of your best so far. You seem to have unravelled a bit so that you let us further inside (or am I just getting a little less thick).
Waltzing in nausea, and I particularly like the way you handled a tricky couple of lines
"too tight is the outside,and too loose is what is in"
Very well done again and always admire your work.

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garside

Fri 4th Mar 2011 22:38

Hi Marianne

will email you

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Anthony Emmerson

Fri 4th Mar 2011 14:08

Hi Marianne,

There's certainly a great deal packed into your cerebral space!

I always admire the skill involved in expressing the universal with new images or language. And I would certainly agree - we do need our own inner space. Especially liked these lines:

Up to our knees, we need,
a soft press of dark red,

for their sonority. That really is some shag pile!

Regards,
A.E.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 4th Mar 2011 13:41

I like this a lot Marianne - really resonates with where my head is at right now. In fact, you could have written this for me. Funny isn't it, how come sometimes words that we wouldn't previously have 'got' now come alive?

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