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No point; point

No point pulling the curtains

No point making the bed

Waste of time picking up clothes

Futile cleaning his head.

 

He thinks today will be lost, will be compost

a day of maggots, twenty four hours of weevils

A shadow lies over it, doomed from the start

It's a day that doesn't rhyme.

 

Or scan.

 

There's no point, it's all out of joint.

 

She sends a text.

Thirty words, one hundred and five letters,

and two question marks.

Two very important question marks.

Each one a touch,

a blessed warming breeze in an Arctic soul.

 

He responds.

 

The day starts, he picks up clothes,

makes the bed, lets in the light,

gets a shave, gets a plan

shakes off the shadows, acts like a man.

 

And he says

'Thank you'

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Elaine Booth

Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:21

Connections are what get us through. Look at us all here, blogging away! The darkness in life illuminates the light: doubt and despair, although undesireable, are part of the human experience, hence it's faith: "for now we see through a glass, darkly". Well, that's what your poem made me think about, Dave! Getting late - that deep-thought time of night approaching!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 19th Mar 2011 17:43

It is a good, original poem, Dave, a personal story for each reader to write. I have no sympathy for persons who must be motivated by other people to 'meet the morning'. Not every day is a 'poem' day. Even if such a nice guy says 'Thank you.'

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Laura Taylor

Fri 18th Mar 2011 10:49

Good title, very interesting structure, enjoyable content. Some good musical rhythms in this too

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Fri 18th Mar 2011 08:44

Thanks Dave, reminds me of how important human connection can be.

Especially liked, "shakes off the shadows, acts like a man"

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