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Sunset

Age 13

 

In the land beyond the sunset lives a maid,

A wondrous maid.

Behind the salmon-streaked horizon

Hides she her perfect form of alabaster white.

In her eyes are the first stars of dusk,

In her glowing hair the sun’s last golden ray,

Bright golden ray.

Her flaming tresses filter through the clouds

That nestle round her milk-white breast.

With a taunting laugh full rich upon her lips

She reaches forth to gild the hills – and me.


But all such splendid things must find

Their ending –

The vixen of the sunset faces death.

Her luster fades away into oblivion,

Leaving not a remnant of her presence

But the brightening stars that once had been

Her eyes.


Cynthia Buell

Age 13


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Comments

<Deleted User> (8043)

Mon 23rd May 2011 02:51

You wrote better poems at 13 than I wrote at 17. Beautiful.

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Andy N

Tue 26th Apr 2011 08:13

Love this Cynthia. My poetry at 13 were mostly terrible, but I think this is really charming.

Thanks for your help on my piece at Poetica the other week. I've now managed to finish re-re-editing that piece and it should be on here
over the next week or so. x

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Isobel

Sun 24th Apr 2011 21:19

What a charming way of describing sunset - most original and stunning from a 13 yr old!

It is so well observed also - I love the 'salmon streaked horizon' - that is exactly the colour we see.

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Fkx

Sun 24th Apr 2011 07:10

It is indeed a pleasure to read and to picture in the mind. Glad to see poems still exist without having the need of alteration.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 23rd Apr 2011 20:15

How absolutely lovely!

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 23rd Apr 2011 19:19

Cynthia this is a charming piece. It has certainly had me thinking of poems that I wrote as a teenager (whilst young and in love) and whether I would ever be brave enough to resurrect them. Well done and bravo!

Philipos

Sat 23rd Apr 2011 18:42

Delightful no need to say another word and one of your special stock no doubt alluded to on earlier occasion x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 23rd Apr 2011 17:27

This poem still gives me pleasure. I have not changed a word.

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