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kiss me with your mouth

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You talk to me and tell me that love makes the world

That from dust,

Man and woman go forth sharing ribs

And Lie in Holy Union, with gold rings on their fingers

A symbol.

That Solomon was pleased,

And sang  in the rapture of our bodies

And that God himself is blessed by my sex,

Offered on silver platters with fine fruits and juices

 for dancing and sweating in the milk

Of our skin.

 

That we would call to life a miracle.

 

For this is how it is

And how it always was.

 

Well, Satan get your tongues out of my ear

I saw you go down on my love and suck his sweet milk

Into the pits of your stomach and spit it out

Into the eyes of the young

A poison of addiction

A craving

A pathos

Marriage never makes it to the altar now

As couples trip over the legs of their adulteries in the aisles

And spouses sit seething resentment 

At the ball and chain they forged in the years

Before this insidious silence and raucous despair.

 

So, I guess its just you and me,

your last daft martyr,

believing in love,

And thee

Casting our eyes for one decent man still alive.

 

You can have the scorn from the joke of me,

And Ill give you the hair from my Samson

And together we'll sow another tree and start again.

 

 

 

The BibleSong of Solomon

◄ Louise

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Steve Smith

Wed 26th Oct 2011 13:42

Hmmm.This poem is like a strong voice singing in a place of worship.I like it. Reminds me of "Braided Lives" , a novel by Margey Piercy. (an american)
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Rachel Bond

Tue 25th Oct 2011 22:58

i dont dispute the chromosome evidence. i cannot say i have studied it but i am aware of the basics of the theory (all science is still theoretical and continually tested). as i say i am not in dispute. personally i know that i am female, i am certain of my gender. biologically i have enough of pmt and hormonal stuff to attest to that. my questions about gender are social. i believe my concerns are created socially, a feeling of 'differentness', of unease with my gender and its associated characteristics as prescribed by society.I believe a lot of women feel this way and always have.my physical attraction to both genders i have always found confusing despite my openess and willingness to accept a queer identity. in all honesty i would prefer a heterosexual disposition. thats is just not reality for me. i have no idea whether this is a genetic or social reality but i am not concerned with that. I have not been able to form a lasting loving relationship with a man but that could be because of personality issues beyond sexuality. I think of men as my friends but intrinsically find them sexual. I think about women in a more objectified way. i m aware that this is not very p.c. anyway this is a big topic...i am fine with discussing this issue with you. if you want to chat in private please use the message facility x

ps in line with the subject of the poem...i have yet to find Gods guidance on sexuality within the bible. athiest/agnostic/christian i believe we are equally given the task of living in a sexual world.

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Rachel Bond

Tue 25th Oct 2011 19:57

thats an interesting illustration you make alana. we are all created within female to become female...i used to like a band called rudimentary peni...i think thats the initial stage of male development. i agree we are all a mixture of different facets of each gender. i know its true of different races that there is more variation of physical type accross race than between races. im not sure how this relates to different genders tho.
the line there was to mimic the tones of the bible. the idea is that the subject is angry with just how far she was short changed by the christian ideal.

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Tue 25th Oct 2011 19:48

Hi Rachel andy. n's comment I think if you know the line? This is how it is! and ever shall be? I don't think it needed adding as I automatically did! Soz I'm an atheist, Adam has an X chromosome, because we all develop from female to male? He also has nipples and ovaries (which drop or not) everything was in place to become female? Male sex is the last bit to develop, That's why we are all such a complex mixture.Anyway I'm not preaching xxx

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Elaine Booth

Wed 6th Jul 2011 21:28

I love the line "your last daft martyr". I feel that very strongly. The last 3 lines are tremendous. All the world weariness but with hope not quite lost. The image of sowing another tree is good - how much time will it take to grow another Eden, yet it is worth trying. Very bitter-sweet, just how I like it! XX

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Amy Houston

Tue 5th Jul 2011 21:08

Wow, Laura was not joking about your writing, 'fanfuckingtastic', erm...yeh you are!!!

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Laura Taylor

Wed 29th Jun 2011 12:55

One word - fanfuckingtastic ;D

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Wed 29th Jun 2011 12:50

very much enjoyed your write Rachael..super stuff and read more than one or twice :o)

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Rachel Bond

Tue 28th Jun 2011 18:24

thanks cynthia, you are absolutely right, i hadnt noticed the 'we'll' mistake. Its a compliment to me that you appreciate the language here. I like to write with reference to the bible, and it does make me laugh that i can use it to justify any one of my resentments ;) any archaic language adds weight to a subject i find and im glad you like what I try to make as a contemporary twist. afterall, biblical society was as immoral as any other and while it seems to me nothing has changed, the line 'casting our eyes for one decent man still alive' refers to a search for christ by those who seek his love and those who wish to crush it. sometimes i fear this search is a naivity...i like to write about the things that attempt to destroy my faith, such as the very thing it is meant to be based upon, love.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 28th Jun 2011 13:50

Rachel, I like this a lot. I haven't read your response yet. For me, this work swirls around with deft words and many allusions, often slightly skewed but maybe more apt for being 'different'. You have a talent for twisting words into new relationships with other words, a major poetic skill that cannot be taught.

Check your last line for 'we'll' (we will) as it is a shame to have this nuisance error at the very end, to diminish its power. I do know that GBS did what he liked with contractions, but I don't think this one is worth it.

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Andy N

Tue 28th Jun 2011 08:15

Top stuff, Rach..

Not 100% sure about 'For this is how it is
And how it always was' as it could be slowing down the action in the build up to the piece.

However, the last stanza is a corker and it's a cracking piece either way.

Keep em coming (thought you had stopped writing for a bit but i knew they would start flowing naturally) x

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Isobel

Mon 27th Jun 2011 21:04

I like the biblical imagery and the deceptive simplicity of the ending.

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Isobel

Mon 27th Jun 2011 21:01

Yes - the path of love isn't paved with gold. Instead, as your poem suggests, infidelity, disappointment and boredom seem to be more common. I think it is better to approach any relationship with an expectation of nothing - doing fond is probably less likely to lead to let down. The end of your poem seems to suggest hope though - weary hope - but hope nonetheless. You are maybe less cynical than me.

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Mon 27th Jun 2011 14:00

Oh to sing the Song of Soloman and to know the joy of true love only to have it tainted by the touch of lust and betrayal, sometime it may not be better to have loved and lost but to never have loved at all. A wonderfully worded piece with delightful and realistic symbologies..one of your best rachel

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