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No Better Ending

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As quiet closes end of day

When evening’s calm has gripped us

I set a fire and in it lay

Dried logs of eucalyptus.

 

A billowing blue smokiness

And flames begin to dance;

The leaves and trees stand motionless,

No breeze to break their trance.

 

The silence of the setting scene

Occasionally lifts

From traffic from the A19

And screeching of the swifts.

 

Of all the ways I might desire

To welcome dusk’s descending

I’d choose this garden and this fire;

There is no better ending.

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Isobel

Sun 17th Jul 2011 08:42

You've changed one of your froms to a to,in the third verse of your audio - it sounds a lot better like that.

A lovely restful piece John - good to see that you can do serious/thoughtful as well as hilarious...

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 16th Jul 2011 10:47

Hi John,

(gripped us = eucalyptus) only YOU mate!

Loved this. The scent of woodsmoke is one of my favourites - so much a conjurer of memories. Small is beautiful!

Regards,

A.E.

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John Embley

Fri 15th Jul 2011 23:04

Oh, wow - I can almost smell that smoke from here - a cracking image - I might try it myself to get away from the road noise of the A690 ... (as long as it doesn't herald my last gasp!)

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Fri 15th Jul 2011 22:49

love it John - is the last verse a metaphor for our last gasp ? - if it is, it works very well along with the first verse. B

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Greg Freeman

Fri 15th Jul 2011 19:17

Idyllic, John, except for the A19. But glad you mentioned it. Makes it an even better poem, somehow

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 15th Jul 2011 18:32

Very lyrical! (Don't set fire to the bird bath though!) :)

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