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Sandcastles

When you were young
you thought me
magical,
secret-keeper,
feeder of dreams.

We bounced high,
laughing
to the sea's edge.
Crumpled sandcastles rebuilt
with lolly-stick towers,
shell battlements
and a bucketed moat,
sea filled, then derelict,
as we ran the blonde grit
never looking back.
 
Free from fear,
our sea waved us
through summer,
its paddled time
blanching our new feet
white as ice cream,
that escaped our lips
through soggy cornets.
 
It took no special effort
to fight those rock monsters,
eat chips out of
last month's newspaper,
with vinegar seeping
through out small fingers,
while we rode the top deck
in pure heaven.
 

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Francine

Sat 24th Sep 2011 17:12

I love the feeling of this.

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Michael Scott

Tue 30th Aug 2011 22:18

as we ran the blonde grit
never looking back.

Lovely poem, picturing me and now my son on the beach as I fulfill the grumpy Dad trying to tune the radio and eat a sandwich role myself.

Michael

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Wed 27th Jul 2011 00:20

pardon the back pedalling Stella,but I missed this poem(now thankfully found)glad I didnt miss it altogether-brill! Stef.x

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 21st Jul 2011 20:56

Fantastic poem Stella, took me back a good few yesrs, lovely lines and images, really enjoyed it. Mind you main thing I remember is the bloody tide coming in too quick just as I had sorted the flamin moat out! Jeff X

Philipos

Thu 21st Jul 2011 20:19

Delightful - thought you wrote recently about writer's block somewhere or am I thinking of someone else!

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Dave Bradley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 17:16

I like this very much, Stella

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John Embley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:42

mmmm ... I recall seemingly endless summer holidays spent on the beach stretched out before us as school ended, and it never used to rain, either, did it? ;)
Lovely images,Stella - got the ould nostalgia bug again!

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Laura Taylor

Thu 21st Jul 2011 10:22

Some lovely lines in this...particularly like:

Crumpled sandcastles rebuilt
with lolly-stick towers,
shell battlements
and a bucketed moat,
sea filled, then derelict,
as we ran the blonde grit
never looking back

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Isobel

Thu 21st Jul 2011 08:42

Lovely Stella. There's nothing quite like the freedom we had as children and the way our imagination could roam. You capture it beautifully.

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Mark Mr T Thompson

Thu 21st Jul 2011 06:37

Beautiful!

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