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only fools

the only way to burst a balloon
is to 
believe 
that the gases inside it 
exist 
to inflate
add a little helium 
and that little bit of plastic
might rise.
once i put my name 
and address on a tag 
cos as a child i was delighted
a stranger might find it
and write to me. 
the balloon burst somewhere
like a hopeful bubble
and i thought 
of the address tag lying in the gutter.
i dont do balloons anymore.
just pleasure in stamping on them 
and hearing the bang like a miniature gunshot.
smililng to see its impact all arround me.
that the noise hs found me centre of attention.
but still its not about me. 
just a big bang and some gases. 

◄ butter flies

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<Deleted User> (9801)

Tue 25th Oct 2011 19:34

I think it's very well written, I like, you express your feelings and you let people into your thoughts, but so easy to read! I have to try free verse xx

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Ray Miller

Fri 30th Sep 2011 20:30

Well, the poem comes to a great climax, the universe is a big bang and some gases and try as I might I'm not the centre. The last two lines are excellent. But it all starts off poorly, I think, the first 9 lines are letting down the rest. Another crap pun for you.

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Rachel Bond

Fri 30th Sep 2011 18:23

haha yep...we lit one on new years and in my new found state of social responsibility wanted to climb up the tree where it had got stuck incase tree burnt down and flaming branch killed passing cat or something...it didnt. theres always next year :)

<Deleted User> (6315)

Fri 30th Sep 2011 14:56



That second to last line Rach..tis a killer.
Thoroughly enjoyed..

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Laura Taylor

Fri 30th Sep 2011 10:55

I'm gonna repost my comments here :)

Fantastic, I LOVE it. You did just the kind of thing that was going through my head seconds after suggesting it, except you added that first bit about belief, about a faith almost.

Love how it's just an insignificant bit of plastic, but then becomes full of hope and dreams until reality strikes and then it's a tag in a gutter again. Brilliant symbol of how life isn't fucking fair! Then that rejection - don't do balloons anymore. Fuck it. I'll use it instead for another purpose.

Christ - actually, that sums up a lot about you and me that poem. I love it. xx

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