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Raising The Dead

We rang in sick and drunk a draught,

stuck a needle on a revolving track;

jumped in bed and shagged ourselves daft

 

to Martha Reeves singing Jimmy Mack.

I opened The Jam and awaited The Clash;

you weren’t my cast, too pale and flat

 

and your nose turned-up in a serial spat

with your dark blue cape that flowed and splashed

from the midnight hour 'til when we crashed.

 

I should have kept you under my hat

or locked up safe in a dark carafe -

poured you out then poured you back.

 

I built a skeleton from photographs;

the empty spaces fill up with black.

I’m trying to put some flesh upon that.

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Ray Miller

Fri 25th Nov 2011 19:53

Thankyou, Stella and Ann.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 25th Nov 2011 18:26

Nice and neat - very enjoyable!

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Thu 24th Nov 2011 19:36


nope not rubbish at all..

Those last two verses, aww Ray really imaginative.

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Ray Miller

Thu 24th Nov 2011 15:27

Thanks, Philipos and Isobel. When I first wrote this I thought it were rubbish, but it's grown on me.

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Isobel

Wed 23rd Nov 2011 21:38

Yes - what a great way of expressing love lost - from the great heady hights of passion to the photographic negative of the empty ever after.

I love the images you draw on here - particularly the idea of conserving the essence of someone in a carafe.

I enjoyed reading this - and I understood it - I think! x

Philipos

Wed 23rd Nov 2011 17:41

A really good poem (eye-catching opening) and so many spicy images in it. All enjoyable with my favs being the last 2 stanzas. Great idea the mosaic of piccies to look back on if only mentally.

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