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wine and roses

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kiss me

in the haystacks

tell me the last time you were this happy

you d been drinking.

slipped the brandy into bed

wrapped it up around your legs

who s to know?

stepping on pillows

round the bend

its hilarious

in the bottom of the plant pot

covered in mud

its piss wet through

its scandalous

flower by flower

hour by hour

im a bum i dont do my work and i get fired

its a slow burn

to a turn

in the stright jacket

mines a double whisky dirty joe.

my name's joe and i'm...

"They are not long the days of wine and roses..

Out of a misty dream

our path emerges

for a while,

then closes

within a dream..."

hot coffee and cold feet,

sober joe's no good to me,

nothing more boring than a goody good

ill give you all booze you want

kiss me there, kiss me

 you should,

by the water

oh a girl knows when she s pretty

far gone

its always another bum

leave a light on

for love

is

the only thing

that keeps

us

from being lonely

and i didnt have that.

 

Erase it all start again

get excited about a chocolate bar like back then.. 

 

You, Me and Booze.

 

A bar sign flashes its reflection

in the window.

 

 

 

◄ hope

past kiss ►

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Rachel Bond

Mon 19th Dec 2011 11:15

im a bum i dont do my work and i get fired(joe on work)'i looked in the mirror and i thought who is that bum? and it was me)
oh a girl knows when shes pretty(kirsty when sober)
get excited by a chocolate bar like back then (kirsty on the days before drink)
its always another bum(pop on kirtsys choice of men in drink)
love is the only thing that stops us from being lonely and i didnt have that(kirsty on reasons for drinking)
hot coffee and cold feet(kirsty on members of AA)
'nothing more boring than a goody good'(kirsty on sobriety)
'my names joe and im...'(joe)

are all direct quotes theyre loosely slung together by the film scenario.ie kissing in haystack. she wants him back but only when hes drunk. very sad.A bar sign flashes in his window at the end as he watches her leave past the bar...is he going to follow her, the booze the bar, leave their little girl alone in her sleep? ah all good questions.

the quote "they are not long the days of wine and roses..." is a poem quoted in the film, she finds it in the encyclopedia Ja - Lo.good as a college education :)

id be happy if anyone liked it. its interesting to note that in a culture which values drink in leisure time so highly, that not more people write about it in poetry..

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 19th Dec 2011 08:31

Great poem Rach, flows subtly and very well, great lines and images - not surprisingly, I identified with some of it, but quite surprisingly I actually vaguely remember some of the film! Don't know how thats happened!

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Rachel Bond

Mon 19th Dec 2011 00:01

thank you, pastiche poetry is fun.

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Andy N

Sun 18th Dec 2011 21:09

excellent, Rach.. possibly in need of a comma near the beginning as the synthax threw me a bit near the start but i still enjoyed it xx

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 18th Dec 2011 20:07

''kiss me in the haystacks'' oo er missus!

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Francine

Sat 17th Dec 2011 23:34

Mmmm... You've captured this so well.

Love these lines:

'it's a slow burn
to a turn
in the straight jacket'

'oh a girl knows when she's pretty
far gone
it's always another bum
leave a light on
for love'

(Typos - corrected)

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