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past kiss

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past kiss

moments tell 

its not time

and then it seems

that rhyme fleeting fell from lips

poised in doubt

though hot

would tear

through skins

so wrapped in paper envelopes

and written 

with spider silks and indian ink

i sent it up in little aeroplanes

across the fields

a distance flew and fell

 my hands catch it now

long time

the  crayon scribbled

little pictures

of this forget

paint it black to see it shine

the slip streams

of lighter air through

fevered dreams as yet

a promise

kept

another time

when skins crinkled over lines

your palm

in red

your hand

holds

mine.

 

 

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 22nd Dec 2011 18:49

I think this is lovely Rachel. Lovely images - the aeroplanes I especially like.

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kealan coady

Thu 22nd Dec 2011 18:33

fuckin hell this is class, some rhythm in it and the half rhymes work really well, overall this is great, read it a few times.

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Dave Bradley

Thu 22nd Dec 2011 18:22

I really like this Rachel. It speaks to me of the fragility of having something special with someone else, but could 'mean' many more things.

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Rachel Bond

Thu 22nd Dec 2011 09:50

thanks francine, a little more abstract, we both need the romance x x

marianne your pure poetry always reminds me not to be come too literal, always inspiring x

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Francine

Thu 22nd Dec 2011 06:24

Really love the beginning and ending of this!
It has such a feeling of innocence about it.

'past kiss
moments tell
its not time
and then it seems
that rhyme fleeting fell from lips
poised in doubt
though hot
would tear
through skins
so wrapped in paper envelopes'

'a promise
kept
another time
when skins crinkled over lines
your palm
in red
your hand
holds
mine.'

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 22nd Dec 2011 01:24

I like hanging around this site at this time as I find the best gems - "written with spider silks and indian ink".
Feathery and disappearing - the longing comes across with every line...but earnest too.
I like. x

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