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Dominoes

A grammar school education

didn’t spare me British Leyland;

post-continental drift saw me slip

into the pits of Birmingham

onto the slow track my path  

should’ve been turning from.

Just a temporary shift - like the duppies

and the muppets had sniffed

before their brains became flaccid  

and got caught up in the gears  

in which night and day were plaited.

Everything was automatic –

but you had to be there

 

and punch yourself in and out     

as mini-avatars descended from the stars

for the trim and spit and polish

of the bodies draped in homage

over exterior, interior and bonnet.

The rattle of chains ran through our veins

and coloured men grey, moulded them

to the rhythm of the track,

to the drag of the magnet.

 

I was the relief man, the filler-in.

When you were in need of a fag or crap,

or your nervous breakdown was nigh,

I’d take your part for 5 or 10 minutes

or the remainder of your life.

 

Some say we struck for higher pay,

to further aspirations or promote a revolution.

More likely, self-preservation: the fear of three stops up,

the barmy house that locked and bolted  nuts;

it must have seeped through our Unconscious

when we stumbled out the pubs every evening

and weekend, where we supped

to bring on oblivion.

A vacation from automation,

a finger off the button.

 

Dominoes at dinnertimes

with young Rastas and old Jamaicans;

I and I in Brummie accents, 

learning a fresh language of duppies,

Zion and mashin’, smashing down the spots

as if daring the machine to reawaken.

My missus started packing me pizzas

and quiches and they’d roll their eyes

in jealousy and wonder, slap me on the shoulder

and assure me that it wouldn’t last.

 

The day I told them I was quitting  

to do Psychiatric Nursing

I could see the buzz run up the track,  

the assembly line silenced and stopped

and the shop rocked with laughter.

We’ll catch you later, they roared,

catch you later three stops up.

 

I don’t come past that often

the ruins of The Austin

and the vanished asylum.

There’s barely a pub left open in Longbridge,

though the streets are swollen

with cars and drunks and madmen.

Long gone the duppies and dominoes falling.

 

 

 

 

 

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Laura Taylor

Fri 2nd Mar 2012 11:07

Good piece - love the detail in it, the hopes, the almost non-aspiration...the desperation. I know that reaction too...faced the same when I told everyone I was giving up my job to go to university, in my late 20s. Contemptuous disbelief and a pressure to not do it, even though I was ready to cut my wrists if I didn't use my mind.

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Ray Miller

Fri 2nd Mar 2012 09:56

Thanks, gents.
Greg, it's quite fascinating that you linked Dominoes with Devaluation. There was no similar intent on my part - Devaluation was first written a year ago, Dominoes is new.But I do see the connection, now you mention it. Why do you think people were "unsure" about commenting?

Harry.Not so different really, there were plenty on the track who could, and sometimes did, fit in perfectly to asylum life.

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 1st Mar 2012 23:56

I worked from aged 16 to 56 in a factory so I know what you are talking about.

Going by the title of your last as Greg did, it was Devaluation that closed four factories in the same road as mine And also started the easy access to Invalidity benefit (to keep the unemployed statistics down) which started off the `dependency` thing we hear so much about now.
Mind, there was also a mad rush by the lucky few to grab the redundancy and early retirement pay.
Having spent many years frequently visiting a mental ward...it must have been some change.

Philipos

Thu 1st Mar 2012 16:53

Great piece of social history and well written. Enjoyed.

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Mike Hilton

Thu 1st Mar 2012 11:36

I like this Ray, as Greg said an epic.

I love the way you've wrtten it, a nice flow to it and couldn't wait for the next line.It made feel as though I was in there with you.

A really good read.

Mike

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Greg Freeman

Thu 1st Mar 2012 10:14

This is an epic poem, Ray - well, all right, technically not an epic - and contains so much fascinating historical and sociological material. I've learned stuff about the assembly line at BL - that perennial splash story for the Daily Mail, 'Red Robbo' and all - that I never knew before. And so going into psychiatric nursing was a logical career move, "the barmy house that locked and bolted nuts"? This poem also puts into context your previous one that many people were unsure about commenting on. Part of a sequence? Good luck with it. A tour de force.

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