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VENUS AT THE NET

 

Look at the nerve of her!

The mettle,

The fettle -

The pluck - magisterial verve of her.

 

The craft of her!

The running,

The cunning

Sleight of the wrist on the haft of her.

 

The pounce of her!

The stoop,

The scoop -

The return of the ball off the bounce of her.

 

The surpass of her!

The clip,

The chip -

The crunch of the foot on the grass of her.

 

The intent on the face of her!

The spring

The swing -

The power of the thwack of the ace of her.

 

How bold she is!

Glorious,

Victorious -

How worthy of gold she is.

 

                                                                                    W O L  Olympic comp

                                 

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 13th Aug 2012 19:38


Thanks all for being so kind.

Isobel,
Thanks for the tip, but it`s okay if I`ve left it too late...It`s actually the first part of poem I`m hoping to complete on a different ending theme and which (If I can finish the bloody thing!) I hope to blog later..I posted it in desperation at not doing an Olympic one.

Thanks anyway

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 13th Aug 2012 16:06

Unusual choice of rhythm in words. Good one!

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John Coopey

Mon 13th Aug 2012 15:13

Nice one, Harry.
Great discipline and rhythm.

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Isobel

Sun 12th Aug 2012 09:49

Great flow and pace Harry. I love the way you've played with language. Enjoyed reading and I'd imgagine it would perform well.

You haven't tagged this properly. The tag is WOL Olympic Competition and needs to go in under tags. If you edit the poem you will see the tag for it at the bottom. Am only saying this to make it easier for Graham to pick up all the poems when he comes to do his list.

<Deleted User> (6315)

Sat 11th Aug 2012 20:20

Really good Harry... :)

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sat 11th Aug 2012 19:29

Centre of the podium for this gonger H.xx

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steve pottinger

Sat 11th Aug 2012 14:42

What a wonderful poem to find on my first visit to the site for far too long. Really, really good.

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Margaret Holbrook

Sat 11th Aug 2012 08:49

Like this, like the flow of it.

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 11th Aug 2012 00:28

well done Harry.An excellent entry.

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