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Rythm

   Rhythm

Back in the days, when music had beat
I'd dance all night, and move my feet
The music had rhythm, a beat of its own
When I was a lad, before I had grown
But these days, it isn't the same, 
My feet won't move, my legs are lame
Boys and girls, would twist and groove, 
But for me, my legs won't move
There I'd sit, upon a chair on wheels
Listening to the rhythm and how it feels
Dancing for me, is in the past
Because of my bike, my legs are smashed
When I was a lad, young and carefree
I never once thought, it would happen to me
I had a bike, use to ride fast, 
Open the throttle, give it a blast
Speeding along, doing over a ton
Hit some gravel, my back wheel spun
Going to fast and in a spin
That was one battle, that I didn't win
Hit the wall, a head on crash
That is how, my legs did smash
My dancing days, are now long gone
No matter the record, no matter the song
I just sit here, upon my chair on wheels
I listen to the rhythm and how it feels

Gary baldwin
  09-03-08

◄ In to the night

Walking the dog ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 9th Feb 2014 20:11

logging off Gary-we'll catch you later for a chat-cheers dude!xx

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 9th Feb 2014 19:50

glad it is only a poem and not a real story.xx

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John Coopey

Fri 7th Feb 2014 22:35

I only came off mine once, Gary, but it was a write-off. These days I've gone back to a push bike and I reckon that's even more dangerous!
Enjoyed the rhythm throughout; it works well when the subject is about the rhythm you can't dance to.
My only reservation would be "my legs did smash". For me, "did" always sounds like scansion packing.
Enjoyed. Keep posting.

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Gary Baldwin

Fri 7th Feb 2014 19:50

Thank you all for the comment, it is just a poem, though I have been off my bike a couple of times, I have walked away.
ThankS
Gary.

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Steve Higgins

Fri 7th Feb 2014 19:44

I have had so many scary experiences on my bikes, I shudder to think about them now. I remember once on a dual carraigeway that was quiet but had been recently resurfaced and covered with chippings, I wound the gas back and to my total astonishment, a farmer walked out into the road, put his hand up and a huge posse of cattle crossed the road in front of me! How I got out of that without crashing I do not know! You poem brought it all back!
Best wishes,
Steve

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Starfish

Fri 7th Feb 2014 19:01

Great rhyme and rhythm. I agree, very moving.
Best Wishes Starfish.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Fri 7th Feb 2014 18:02

our deepest sympathies Gary.Very moving poem indeed.xx

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