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Fibonacci on the last school run

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A spider's chandelier with Gatsbyesque enticement

indulges the mumbling aphid's lament,

red berries decorate the fringe of a melodic carousel of swallows

whilst two more riders swirl their eyes and caw.

This was just the mornings...

 

On evenings we saw raves-

black v's in tye-dye skies,

a ginger stoat did the caterpillar,

frozen ozone refracts a mobile of rainbows.

Oh we don't need you to believe us,

we walked it, we were there.

 

Giants were we, tromping the precipice

of the top tier of this green cake

hand in hand, condescending

the fields and canal; a playmat for a choo-choo, horsies

a plush staffie pulling Barbie in pink and black lycra;

homemaker nee career girl:

accessories included.

 

These things weren't noted with a Wordsworthian flute

but the grudge trudging dirge on the seethed frame

 of a tired girl with hormone collider not yet in full throttle,

apron strings a taut catapult to liberty held fast

by a staunch matriarch soldered to the idea

this would last forever.

 

We had the love of a tree in common-

thick trunk, mostly dead,

sharp contours on a gnarly head.

 

This old age Elderflower we adored;

Anthony Fibonacci, husky emerald skirted independent witch,

at dusk in his field he provides a show of pipestrel marionettes

for the poo pooing of the donkey.

 

Come morning his claws pull the yellow sun separate

from night's shell, smudging the bone white moon into blue.

 

In the end he always knew

I'd have no choice,

this coarse obstacle,

but to release my grip.

I'd grope the intangible air when at last

she returned to where I found her:

in the world's finest part-

in the pattern of a heart.

daughtersgrowing up in the countryside

◄ Fairy Tail

Getting a Ribbing ►

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Cathy Crabb

Sun 26th Oct 2014 15:51

Thanks very much Travis...you may have a point...I'd use separate twice then though wouldn't I? Or if you mean swap that around...hmmm

Travis Brow

Fri 17th Oct 2014 07:46

'black v's in tye-dye skies,' splendid line.
Also, if i've understood the penultimate verse correctly, I'd be tempted to place the word 'separate' where the word 'pull' appears in the same line. That said, they are excellent lines.

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Cathy Crabb

Fri 19th Sep 2014 08:42

Thank you so much for your thoughts on this. I have edited and also taught should be taut Cynthia yes, I am terrible at spelling and always rushing.

I can't just leave that school run behind, I have to have something more than photographs! Cx

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Dave Carr

Sat 13th Sep 2014 08:44

Wonderful. Makes me want to tear up everything I ever wrote. Dave

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Tue 9th Sep 2014 14:43

unbelievably fantaz!xx

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Ged the Poet

Mon 8th Sep 2014 21:01

The first line and the photo enticed me in...

So much in there. Many visions. Had to read it a few times to capture the intensity of it. Brilliant.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 8th Sep 2014 13:44

I do agree, there are many lovely lines here, creating intense imagery to support many intricate thoughts. I have not yet decided whether some of the 'interesting' spelling is wholly intended to extend layers of meaning as in 'taught'. I do get 'coarse obstacle' (very sharp).

IMO, this work does not read quickly but must be savoured through each expression.

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Cathy Crabb

Mon 8th Sep 2014 12:46

Thanks Greg! I have changed the picture to the particular web that inspired the verse, dew bejeweled.

Thanks for reading this, Cathy.

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Greg Freeman

Mon 8th Sep 2014 12:09

This made me remember collecting cobwebs with bent twigs on the way to school in Sept/October, when I was about six or seven. I hadn't thought about that in years. Some beautiful lines here, Cathy. Thanks for posting.

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