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Train window

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I thought I knew someone

standing accross the road,

she was waiting for a gap in traffic...

Then, there was another time,

alighting from a cab

and carrying fancy bags...

There she was again

-I think-

seated opposite me

on that train from Liverpool,

but that was just a reflection...

There was one time at a party 

when she smiled

my way, I thought, but it was

for her friends...

We both shouted an order

at a crowded bar,

I turned to greet her

then we where seperated

by a shoulder and I was asked

for my order...

Maybe she was a stalker-

with bags of fancy shopping?

She would smile at passers by

-a neighbour perhaps-

that must be it...

Then she moved away,

as she stopped singing

in my garden nor laughing

at my jokes.

But she left me a

sodden letter, hand delivered

through my letterbox

but I was too busy

to stop and read it,

I left it for another time:

I had a dull rainy day to walk.

 

words and foto  T Carroll

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Comments

Preeti Sinha

Sat 27th Sep 2014 18:02

I agree with Daniel. Your work is very deep, very personal. Did you finally read what the sodden letter said or are you actually speaking metaphorically about a woman you have lost?

Then she moved away,

as she stopped singing

in my garden nor laughing

at my jokes.

Very touching, very sad.

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Ged the Poet

Thu 25th Sep 2014 12:03

Another snapshot offering a window of imagination to the reader and a want for more of the story. Your work is very deep Tommy and I like it very much. The photographs also enhance your writing. I see the reflection of the light above the tree line on a cold rainy day from the train window as a beacon of hope. There is a light that will never go out. (I hope you know what I mean without sounding soft).
Nice one Tommy.

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