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here...there...everybloody where...

I laugh at your jokes and eat the 

sandwich that you offer me...

why do they...look at me...oh god...

why do they ask me to ...leave

ohh..who eats this sandwich...please pay the bill 

as I cannot pay the bill, I mean it, the bill...

why are my legs dancing...

all my open thinking is this silly dance...

(look!)...(I will sit down and I think)

 

''Babe,    babe?   shall we leave?

eh?...''

 

(this bitch has me sussed)...no...I mean...

let's stay...or maybe...(oh why do I sound so different?)

 

''Babe,    I can call a cab...''

 

Let's go...(I could cry, only that I don't want to)

 

the floor is asking me to wait (I know I can survive)

how far are my legs...

 

''hold onto me...''

I am tired... I need speach

speak...spatch... this word will not

cuu

''Please, will someone call an ambulance!''

 

words and foto  T Carroll

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 3rd Feb 2015 20:23

You have it in one Laura

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Laura Taylor

Wed 12th Nov 2014 09:55

I meant to comment on this at the time - it's stayed with me. The panic, the confusion, the loss of control, the straining attempt to keep the real NOW, and not let go of it, not let it twist itself out of the grasp. It makes me think brain problems/injury/stroke/epilepsy. I become very anxious when I read it.

To make a poem of it - I do admire you for that. I love this one, Tommy.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 26th Oct 2014 21:49

Candice I now realise the issue.

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Candice Reineke

Sat 25th Oct 2014 17:46

This is great, Tommy! I first assumed that your character was drunk. But perhaps it's something else? Like maybe how I feel when I get low blood sugar?...can't think, can't speak coherently, can't function...and yes, sometimes they have to call an ambulance.

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 7th Oct 2014 17:59

'Barney at Mo's' are two characters in 'The Simpsons' ;) (my drawing, Barney looks for the toilet)

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Jane Ozkowski

Tue 7th Oct 2014 17:28

Hi Tommy,

I'm not too sure what "Like Barney at Mo's" is, but this felt very Bukowski-esque to me. (I mean this in the best possible way). And yes, I'd love to hear your suggestion.

Jane

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Jane Ozkowski

Sat 4th Oct 2014 21:56

I felt a little drunk while I was reading this. I really enjoyed it. Great job!

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