The figure in his cloak of light
is transforming the heart of a new believer
behind him a penumbra of shadow
of screaming souls.
The new man is forever tagged
he is now aware of Heaven
and its open door
and turns his back on the doubting past
those human traits reformed at last.
He is in love with love itself
cannot now find his original self
for the light is blinding
cannot go back
but he feeds off the power
forever and ever
at the top of the ivory tower.
Thanks Laura. Do your socialist friends think you a bonkers to even bring up Jesus in any context? I'm glad you like the poem: I thought the last line was pivotal in the sense that there is an unreality element to the experience (I imagine). Should I have made it " to forever and ever climb the ivory tower" , perhaps. Actually I prefer that myself ! Another possibility would be " To gaze at the ivory tower." Please elaborate, thanks.
Well Jesus was a Socialist, Ray, but whenever I've said that to my fellow Socialists (atheists the lot of em) they get quite angry and defensive.
I do like most of this, but I'm not sure of the wording of that last line.
Thanks for the intelligent perceptive comment Cynthia. You have revealed something in my arsenal, which is that I often use satire when on serious subjects. The truth is that there is never a free ride - always a contrary view with most experiences. The born again idea is very real indeed for those in that world, but I maintain my distance while trying to analyse the psychology ; to give yourself wholeheartedly is very hard for me , so perhaps I need it ! Jesus apparently loved the thieves and prostitutes without them having to be born again, surely!
with respect, Ray.
This is a strong subject, and a very brave one.
I know you strongly dislike interference of any kind, but I'm risking it. 'the ivory tower' seems to be a contradiction of the sincerity I thought you originally meant; so, I conclude that you are being sarcastic rather than supportive of the 'born again' experience. I'm not sure. Is that your intent? Ambiguity?
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Laura Taylor
Wed 30th Mar 2016 09:38
Sorry for the delay in replying Ray - been up the bloody wall again with Dad and work stuff.
Anyhoo, cannae remember the original now (!) but this ending reads well and does not set my teeth on edge or owt, so that's a result eh? ;)
And yes, yes they do think I'm bonkers :)