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boiling waves of deep sine wave bass –

flick the back of my eyes like the tip of a tongue

 

a butterfly-and im sweating through my socks

and im shedding my cells like midnight snakeskin

 

now you are walking slowly through a strobe light

you seem not to move at all

there/gone/there/gone

 

and you are my friend

and you are my friend

and you are my friend

and you are my friend

 

i have crept outside and the pitch black night is blinding me

i have left pieces of my brain like breadcrumbs behind me

 

i have left my heart and soul in the slap of a wooden spoon on a leather car seat

manipulated digitally to become a heartbeat

 

no bass now just a haunting gospel choir

singing one day all this will change

one day all this will change

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Stu Buck

Fri 14th Oct 2016 15:29

thanks suki! just make sure the wooden spoon is slapping a leather car seat

(there is truth to this line, as this is how some people make there drum beats)

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suki spangles

Fri 14th Oct 2016 13:34

Too many good lines to shake a wooden spoon at.
"Boiling waves of deep sine wave base..".I'll make sure to use this line in a conversation when I'm next at the supermarket!

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Stu Buck

Thu 13th Oct 2016 21:05

hello david. nope, i wrote this at 5am this morning while contemplating the future of humanity and eating coronation chicken. glad you liked it, your analysis is spot on.

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Stu Buck

Thu 13th Oct 2016 17:23

cheers ray. glad you enjoyed it

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raypool

Thu 13th Oct 2016 17:02

A really lovely piece Stu. Explicit and persistent - like a dream yet so real. It sounds like a tempting and slightly dangerous situation for the soul and peace of mind.

Ray

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Laura Taylor

Thu 13th Oct 2016 14:08

Nah, Ibiza's had its day now.

Welsh mountains, that's where it's at ?

"belly like a walnut" ? I still use that phrase, on *cough* occasion.



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Stu Buck

Thu 13th Oct 2016 13:55

im not sure. yeah i agree, back to the hidden sites and 3am raids i fear. or, shudder, to ibiza...

tyers is one of my favourite characters from any tv series. i especially love his telephone, kettle rave

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Laura Taylor

Thu 13th Oct 2016 13:38

Ahhh - I know what this is about, but never went there. I stayed up North to rave.

Wooden spoon, heh, makes me think of Tyres on Spaced ? We'd dance to the tunes in our heads whilst waiting for a cab.

I like the repetition of 'and you are my friend'. So Stu - what's yer name, where you from, and what you on? ?

Where do we go from here? I'm glad I had my days, but all I see now is a return to illegal raves I'm afraid. Or not, actually ?

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 13th Oct 2016 12:18

Stu, perhaps you've given too much away by commenting first.

I love Line 2 and 5,6,7

We've all seen girls (I presume it was a girl) dancing in strobe lights, holding us spellbound!

The wooden spoon/leather car seat line is classic!

good work

Graham

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