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cracked

egg you are shot through with veins like a mother’s swollen teat

egg you are with feathered with mucus, like snot in a shell

egg you are a sparkling white albumen and a pallid, jaundiced yolk

whisked with cream and pepper you become a truffled cloud of disappointment

egg you are shit out, sat on, hatched or caught

will you be a mothers world or enrobed in cheap mayonnaise

perhaps paprika’d or sprinkled with the heady petrichor of cumin

egg you have tissue thin membrane just under the shell

if i peel you just right after a bath of boiling brine

and a swift rinse in the taps ice cold expulsion

i can stitch a sheet out of this trembling crepe

if i hold it to the light i can see dreams beyond

figures now sport a hungover haze, ghosts in heaven

egg i will crack you with the palm of my hand

let life dribble through my fingers

to feel in control once again

🌷(1)

◄ alva, who is darkness

lay my neck on this block of wood but make it one clean swing ►

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John Bastard

Thu 17th Nov 2016 14:48

'let life dribble through my fingers
to feel in control once again'

apt.

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Stu Buck

Wed 2nd Nov 2016 11:40

wow suki fine praise indeed. as the owner of a 'howl' tattoo i have to say i was made up when i read this

thanks martin, it developed a lot while i wrote it which seems to have aided its cause

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Martin Elder

Wed 2nd Nov 2016 09:08

Great poem Stu. It just gets better line by line. I particularly like

if i peel you just right after a bath of boiling brine

Nice one

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suki spangles

Wed 2nd Nov 2016 02:38

Dare I say that the first three lines especially have a certain "Howl" quality to it. Different subject of course, but still..

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Stu Buck

Tue 1st Nov 2016 23:58

thanks both. its not really about eggs at all i dont think, rather our ability to manipulate something pure and use it for our own gain.

then again, maybe its about eggs...

elPintor

Tue 1st Nov 2016 22:54

Sorry, Stu..I can't add anything here because my mind must've been warped by the propaganda of the UPF (United Poultry Farmers) at an early age..

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8liZzROplmk

(annoying, I know)

elP

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Stu Buck

Tue 1st Nov 2016 22:01

thanks both. ray, i love eggs but have to agree that raw and cracked they are quite the most revolting thing

david, you are spot on. i wrote the line 'truffled clouds of disappointment' and wanted to expand from there, it turned into an exercise in how purity can be disturbed by individual need.

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raypool

Tue 1st Nov 2016 20:51

This is a poem you can taste , Stu. I can't praise it highly enough; it jumps off the page and is fascinating in its pathological detail. I think of eggs as basically revolting, yet still enjoy them fried or hard boiled. Otherwise, forget it! I bow to you O culinary master.

Ray

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