it was one of my Fellini dreams
I'm Guido or somebody
and you're one of his lovers,
Carla maybe
anyway, you're all over me
like a cheap suit
clinging tight like Chanel perfume
wrapped around me like a silk scarf
getting closer than briefs
slipping on and off like sheer stockings
wearing me like a hat
but then you notice
my two left feet
and 8½ lace-ups
and say,
"buying shoes must cost you a fortune"
one of my favourite fellini's, pushed back only by the obvious (but still immensely wonderful) la dolce vita. you do his vision justice, an excellent piece and there are real touches of his warmth and humour throughout. bravo sir.
I am tempted to say Paul that the poem falls flat with the end, (as a compliment) and it has a sort of Charlie Chaplinesque humour to it, when considering the lavish romantic element it contains. It is also grotesque . A goodie my man.
Ray
thanks John.
Now what's that expression....small feet, big.......oh, I can't remember....
or was it big hands, big.....
gloves ?
Pah! Little feet.
Thanks Col, I'll give some thought to conjuring up a few steamy stanzas and call it '9½ inches' ? or, more like, 'wishful thinking' ?
David, thank you, too, for the kind compliment. The idea came about from another piece I had started to write about walking in someone else's shoes, but then an amusing image popped into my head of literally having two left feet. Yes, there must be something of the circus about my imagination!
Thanks again chaps, I'm very grateful to you for your comments.
Paul
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Wed 1st Mar 2017 14:42
try updating your 8 1/2 Fellini dreams to 9 1/2 weeks and report back Paul
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Paul Waring
Thu 2nd Mar 2017 13:26
Thanks Ray and Stu, I loved reading your interesting comments. Much appreciated.
Paul