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Inevitabilities

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That winter had teeth sharper than

butchers' knives, enough to make

walls shiver inside paper coats.

Honestly, it was that cold.


Why ever did you think a featherweight

Hillman Imp could fight a blizzard 

all the way to Anglesey that night? 

An early knock-out was inevitable. 


Opportunity came knocking in a 

snow-white anorak, arms wrapped 

tight as a straightjacket, quivering 

apologies about needing to use a phone.


They told you the rescue services were 

stranded too. Inevitably, you had to stay, 

mother insisted, of course it's no bother,

we have a spare room, and made the 

first of many teas.


On the settee, TV off, we began to iron out 

the awkwardness, talking, inevitably, about 

snow and your decision to drive, then

suddenly and spontaneously guffawed

when you said, "the crazy obligation 

of a young nurse"


in a comic voice that bounced back

softly from warmed walls, as I reached 

out to try to hold your words. Raising his 

head, I sensed laughter in our chocolate 

labrador's eyes, as he nuzzled 

closer, filling the space between us.


In time I came to realise the inevitability of 

events on that bleak winter's night in 1963; I 

learned that love finds you, not the other way 

round, and that dogs eyes tell you everything, 

but only if you look close enough.

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◄ Not Quite 8½

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Paul Waring

Sat 11th Mar 2017 17:50

Thank you so incredibly much Cynthia for the most beautiful comments in praise of my writing. I am deeply touched and can't tell you how grateful I am for your kindness.

Paul

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 10th Mar 2017 10:02

For me, Paul, it is the 'intimacy' you evoke, with what you choose to talk about and how you choose to say it. Your words create atmosphere and deep feeling, a sense of real participation in your experience. Including the dog is icing on the cake - a superb choice to conclude the moment. I highly respect your work.

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Paul Waring

Sat 4th Mar 2017 14:23

thank you so much for another wonderfully kind compliment Stu. I really appreciate how much you've encouraged me.

Sorry I am replying late, I somehow managed to miss this comment yesterday.

Cheers,

Paul

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Stu Buck

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 19:11

brilliant paul. i couldnt work out where it was going, was it 'misery' or something more touching. i'd have been happy either way but the ending was sweet, touching and superbly written.

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Paul Waring

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 18:08

Thanks Colin (again). Our next door neighbour had a Hillman Hunter for donkey's years, I think it ran on tobacco judging by how much it coughed and spluttered and wouldn't start each morning.

Thanks Graham, I'm feeling very left out now, having never driven a Hillman ? but I'm sure you're right.

Thanks Ray, what a truly wonderful and touching thing to say about this piece and my writing. I'm trying to stick to my 'ditch the ditties' campaign, hope it's working. And, yes, I was a passenger in a Husky in 1963!

Thanks to all you lovely, warm-hearted gents.

Paul

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raypool

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 14:28

A vivid and satisfying train of events Paul beautifully expressed. To say you are in your stride would be an understatement. I well remember that winter. If I was nineteen you must have been too young to drive my man. Ah! perhaps you were a passenger.

Ray aythangyow.

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 11:28

I think Hillman Imp (my first car) engines all found their way into racing motorcycle sidecars.

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Fri 3rd Mar 2017 09:09

oooh, well my dad had a Hillman Hunter so there! ? have we covered the whole Hillman family of cars now?

I hope the Easyjet Escort Mark II has lots of legroom but maybe not a sunroof. I'm glad to hear it's pissing down in Lisbon too - that makes me feel like I can deal with this day now and get on with my chores. Toodle-oo!

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Paul Waring

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 08:56

Thanks Col, my family had a Hillman Husky in 1963 but I thought a Hillman Imp worked better. I'm sure some must still be rattling along roads somewhere!

Thanks for the nice thought about packing. We'll start doing that over the coming days before we travel back in our Easyjet Escort Mark II ?

Paul

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Paul Waring

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 08:52

Thanks elP, I too, know nurses, who would agree with what your sister says. Nice comment about the choc lab!

Paul

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Fri 3rd Mar 2017 08:51

love that opening verse Paul and the Hillman Imp! I wonder have any survived or did they all just crumble into rusty piles of dust? I'm in catch up mode this morning so have only just come to read this one. Hope the packing is going well and you have more than a Hillman Imp to travel back in. Cheers, Col

elPintor

Fri 3rd Mar 2017 00:59

I have a sister who's a nurse, and to hear her tell it, there's nothing all that romantic. But, I must admit, my ears perked up a bit when the chocolate lab began to pay attention.

elP

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Paul Waring

Thu 2nd Mar 2017 18:54

Thank you Frances, I'm pleased you liked this.

And David, thank you so much for your comments, and for the truly kind and generous compliment you have paid me. I also enjoyed the bastard remark, btw! Thank you again, kind sir.

Paul

Frances Macaulay Forde

Thu 2nd Mar 2017 17:27

Yes.
?Also very sweet and romantic.

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Paul Waring

Thu 2nd Mar 2017 15:08

Thank you Andy for your kind comment, much appreciated. I hope all is well with you.

Paul

Travis Brow

Thu 2nd Mar 2017 14:12

Lovely Paul, absolutely lovely.

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