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Bar room blues

Borrowed bar room smiles

that make me think

for a moment

I have a future

With the doe, eyed princess

Who looks across the dance floor

But her eyes are always for someone else

The finely chiselled stud

With the smoothly tousled freshly pressed cheeks

And all the right moves

Assured of all he has

And all he does

As he slides across the floor

Pulling her to his chest

The self-assured closely cut

White patterned shirt

Maroon flared trousers

Over stacked shoes

Not a piece out of place

A slow dance or two

A smooch under the hazy self-absorbing light

He on pints of soapy lager

She cradling rum and coke

Fuelled ready for a time of undiluted passion

They make off into the night

As I return home

And all that has been me

Remains mine

And mine alone

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John Coopey

Sat 6th May 2017 21:36

My student days were spent watching from the sidelines the girls dancing round their handbags. I'd just about built up enough courage by the the "La la la la la la la las" half-way through "Het Jude" (last dance of the night) to ask one to dance. Memories.

<Deleted User> (13762)

Sat 6th May 2017 21:25

Martin, I can't believe you mentioned Sherry's in Brighton. Must've spent half my life in there early 80's before it went all yucky Pink Coconutty. I was very much part of the post punk new romantic scene - they did a couple of excellent alternative music nights there each week. The laser light show was incredible. What a place. I always felt the Top Rank over the road was more Saturday Night Fever. That's where my brother used to go.

We'd drink in the Electric Grape beforehand - it was near the original Virgin shop bottom of Queens Road. I never got to DJ in Sherrys but I did the Grape for a while and some other smaller venues around town. Oh you've really stirred up some good memories Martin!

cheers
Col

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Martin Elder

Sat 6th May 2017 19:53

Thanks Colin, David, Ray and Neil
I guess it does have a touch of Saturday night fever about it. I was recalling a place called sherry's in Brighton which I think later became the pink coconut. Don't know if you ever saw it Colin
I think it has been an all too familiar scenario for a lot of people David. I doubt much has changed since the seventies.
I forgotten about Hai Karate and medallions. I know what you mean about being shy Ray.
Thanks Neil I am glad you like it. The drinks were usually pretty disgusting and watered down in those days in some of the large hostelries and clubs or disco's as they were then known
Thanks again everybody for reading
Martin

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Neil Robertson

Fri 5th May 2017 19:49

Amazing poem Martin! That line about undiluted passion as an antithesis to the alcoholic drinks is just perfect. Great piece.

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raypool

Fri 5th May 2017 19:24

This is not a gastro pub is it Martin! It does speak of Hai Karate after shave and medallions and fantasy; very well and neatly expressed. Why was I so horribly shy in the seventies? With the benefit of experience now......

Ray

<Deleted User> (13762)

Fri 5th May 2017 08:59

oh fever night fever night fever....

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