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rainy day in may

The cafes alive today

The throbbing throng

of hardy rained soaked song

in idle chatter

of weather, all too much

baby’s prams and buggies

mothers aging matriarchs

food frying toasted boiling baking

plates of omelettes toast sausage

egg and chips

steaming tea mocha latte

coke and 7 up

mugs cups and chinking glasses

pensioners sit in silent stare

of mock retreat from advancing years

and he sits on his own

a tousled shocking hair amok

talking to himself

his thoughts pacing up and down

shaking ready to repair

after downed cup of coffee

it’s to the outside world

and through nicotine heavy bearded breath

to smoke another treasured cigarette

🌷(4)

◄ Bar room blues

I have seen ►

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Martin Elder

Thu 1st Jun 2017 19:24

Thanks Kim, Colin, Cynthia and David

Thanks for you reference to count Arthur strong Colin. I love the tap dancing shoes. You are possibly right about the Arthur brightening up any cafe.
thanks for the incisive comments once again Cynthia. Now I re-read I think you are right and will amend. I know my editing skills are not always what they should be much appreciated.
David you are so right, every café has its regular characters, it must been fascinating with the one you talk about being a celebrity. the one that I mentioned is a regular and gives the impression of barely tolerating the world and all who reside in it.
Thanks again everybody its always encouraging to get feed back from other poets
Cheers Martin

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 30th May 2017 14:36

Really good, Martin. Well caught scenario. The brevity works well.

I think you have the odd word serving no real purpose. Any chance I might be right?

<Deleted User> (13762)

Tue 30th May 2017 09:43

lovely poem Martin but can't help but think your cafe needs cheering up with this chap:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MShWyT5g96c

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Kim Whysall-Hammond

Mon 29th May 2017 22:26

A fine poem, lovely description

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