Earsplitting
Shrieking with laughter she free wheeled down the hill
Plaits like twin kite tails streaming behind her
Starlings screech. An owl, late to bed, screams blue murder
Her red cardigan, an emblem, against the unrelenting green
Straight legs held aloft, exquisite pleasure of heels
Digging into thin air. The rush of wind on soft cheeks
Exhilaration of speed, obliterating all thoughts of
What she's left behind
Unkind words that, once spoken, cannot be unheard
Ripping of the safety net that decency had woven
Easy breaking of vows that once held tight
She surrenders to the momentum
She reaches for the momentous
The noise was ear-splitting
He was only doing thirty
She came out of nowhere
She was smiling but not breathing
Hazel ettridge
Wed 31st May 2017 12:55
Thank you for the feedback Cynthia - useful and constructive as ever. I had already edited out quite a few words but maybe not enough. I was going for the richness of the moment - smelling the roses as life speeds past us - but need to reflect more on this. Perhaps I can't have both.