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Sun top table bare

Its Friday and it’s four o’clock

At the gardener’s arms

And the boys are at the bench

Shirts off

Sun out

Baking staking hot

The beers are in

The smokes are out

The jokes are flying

And dying like swatted flies on table tops

But laughter pervades none the less

Across reddened sultry crowns and cheeks

Where bare bravado reigns

In the hope

Of topless golden skin

Like the amber nectar

They swallow down

In great heaving gulps

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◄ I have seen

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Martin Elder

Fri 23rd Jun 2017 18:10

Thanks to All for reading this piece glad you all enjoyed. This was a scene I viewed a few weeks back, one Friday afternoon as I sat in a car at some traffic lights waiting for them to change right by this local pub.
I did toy with the idea of making it longer Colin but I think Cynthia's right it's plenty long enough. I can have a tendency some times to witter on and on and......yawn.
Anyway thanks again everybody. Cheers!

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Laura Taylor

Thu 22nd Jun 2017 13:15

Yep, proper enjoyed this Martin - good one!

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Stu Buck

Wed 21st Jun 2017 20:22

awesome martin. on my way to my partners house we pass several of these large chain pubs and you have captured the scene, with all its positivity AND desperation, quite brilliantly. clever.

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Wed 21st Jun 2017 19:11

I finished this wanting to shout 'more, more' so sorry Cynthia I have to disagree with you on the length! ?

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Michaela Sheldon

Wed 21st Jun 2017 18:52

Summer lovin!!!!

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 21st Jun 2017 15:14

Joyful stuff.
To be in the company of sun and friends,
The happy memory never ends!

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Tom Doolan

Wed 21st Jun 2017 12:47

Nice work Martin - I raise my glass to you - cheers :)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 21st Jun 2017 10:02

Terrific, just fab! - in every way -concept, vocab, structure, title .... length - etc.

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